Talk:Jesse Puljujärvi/GA1

GA Review

Unsuccessful. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 09:01, 7 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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Reviewer: Lee Vilenski (talk · contribs) 23:20, 25 January 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Hello, I am planning on reviewing this article for GA Status, over the next couple of days. Thank you for nominating the article for GA status. I hope I will learn some new information, and that my feedback is helpful.

If nominators or editors could refrain from updating the particular section that I am updating until it is complete, I would appreciate it to remove a edit conflict. Please address concerns in the section that has been completed above (If I've raised concerns up to references, feel free to comment on things like the lede.)

I generally provide an overview of things I read through the article on a first glance. Then do a thorough sweep of the article after the feedback is addressed. After this, I will present the pass/failure. I may use strikethrough tags when concerns are met. Even if something is obvious why my concern is met, please leave a message as courtesy.

Best of luck! you can also use the {{done}} tag to state when something is addressed. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)}

Please let me know after the review is done, if you were happy with the review! Obviously this is regarding the article's quality, however, I want to be happy and civil to all, so let me know if I have done a good job, regardless of the article's outcome.

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Puljujärvi scored 12 goals and 28 points in 39 regular season games.

He led the team in points and goals and shared the top spot in assists with Juho Lammikko. In the entire SM-liiga leaderboard, he was in a shared fourth place with Tappara's Kristian Kuusela, until the SM-liiga season was ended due to the COVID-19 pandemic after the penultimate round of the regular season. In the Champions Hockey League, Puljujärvi was the Kärpät's best scorer with Michal Krištof and Jakub Krejčík with four points.

The whole statistics section

The whole awards section

Could you cite these bits before I go any further? Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 15:45, 29 January 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Hello! I beleive that I have fixed the problems now. – Poriman55 - Meddela mig! 18:30, 29 January 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Hi @Poriman55 and @Lee Vilenski, reminder ping! -- asilvering (talk) 16:58, 21 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Without any responses to the below, I'd have to fail this one. I'll give the nom a couple more days after this ping and I'll close. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 11:34, 22 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Lee Vilenski, it's been another couple of weeks. As best I can tell, Poriman55, though active elsewhere, has not edited the article since 16 February when they made a single edit that changed "ice ball" to "bandy". BlueMoonset (talk) 02:14, 7 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Yeah, that's fine. Sadly I'll fail this now. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 09:01, 7 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

What is "ice ball"? Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:32, 16 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Puljujärvi moved to Oulu alone - where? Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:32, 16 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]
in the C-junior team - the what? Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:32, 16 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Puljujärvi strengthened the C-youth in the playoffs - what does this mean? Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:32, 16 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]
he became one of the key players in his team^{[according to whom?]} Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:32, 16 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]
managed to score - just say "scored". Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:32, 16 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]
the NHL scouting office listed Puljujärvi in second place among players playing in Europe - for what? Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:32, 16 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Probably need to link "draft" 'Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:32, 16 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]
He opted to wear sweater no. 98 with the team, making him the first NHL player to do so since 1985, when Brian Lawton wore the number in a regular season game.[25] But he later chose to change his number to no. 13 for the 2020–21 season.[citation needed] - why is this important? Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:32, 16 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]
I'd rather we said "played X minutes", rather than "got X minutes of ice team". Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:32, 16 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Puljujärvi managed to play - any time you see Managed to, it's probably not suitable. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:32, 16 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Puljujärvi was dealt by the Oilers to the Carolina Hurricanes - he was what?Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:32, 16 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Some ^{[citation needed]} tags to fix. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:32, 16 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]
learned to straighten his playing to suit the small rink - do what? Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:32, 16 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Review meta comments

I'll begin the review as soon as I can! If you fancy returning the favour, I have a list of nominations for review at WP:GAN and WP:FAC, respectively. I'd be very grateful if you were to complete one of these if you get time. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 23:20, 25 January 2024 (UTC)[reply]

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.