Talk:Jared Lee Loughner/GA1
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Reviewer: Vaibhavgupta1989 (talk · contribs) 11:10, 17 June 2012 (UTC)
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[edit]Hello! Te lead section is short in length. Please expand it by providing a comprehensive view on the topic. Detailed analysis coming up next week.Regards Vaibhavgupta1989 (talk) 11:10, 17 June 2012 (UTC)
It's been a week, where's the detailed analysis?--Hoponpop69 (talk) 21:26, 28 June 2012 (UTC)
- You still haven't expanded the lead section. I was waiting for you to make edits. I would now be writing in this space on a daily basis. Here's a very brief review:
- You still haven't expanded the lead section. I was waiting for you to make edits. I would now be writing in this space on a daily basis. Here's a very brief review:
1) First line of the lead section:"is an American man" (Inappropriate Usage); must be "is an American citizen".
2) Place a comma mark after end of parenthesis in "born September 10, 1988)".
3) Lead Section is too short. Please provide a brief description of the incident and the present status of the charges framed against him in a separate paragraph.
It would help expand the lead section and summarize the contents written in section 3 and section 4 of the article. The article, at present, has 17000 characters. As per-length criteria of the lead section, the lead section must have 2-3 paragraphs. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Vaibhavgupta1989 (talk • contribs) 15:26, 29 June 2012 (UTC)
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[edit]Reasons for quick fail- Neutrality of the article is highly disputed and there is an edit war. Please work upon it before renominating the article for GAC. Also, work upon lead section length.