Talk:James D. Ramage/GA1

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Reviewer: Ed! (talk · contribs) 15:55, 7 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I think you could just remove the first sentence of the lead, " is a significant figure in the history of U.S. naval aviation. " as it sounds like editorializing and doesn't strongly establish his notability as the second sentence does. Try: "James D. "Jig Dog" Ramage (19 July 1916 – 21 July 2012) was a combat leader in World War II and a major factor in putting nuclear-capable aircraft aboard aircraft carriers. Before retirement he attained the rank of rear admiral."
- This was left over from the original before I expanded the article. Re-worded. Hawkeye7 (talk) 17:51, 7 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"Japanese aircraft carrier Ryūhō" needs to be appropriately italicized in the lead, and again in the World War II section.
- Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 17:51, 7 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Flag officer should be linked in the last para of the lead.
- Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 17:51, 7 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"Only one Enterprise plane was lost in combat, although five more were lost operationally." -- It might be helpful to clarify what you mean by "operationally."
- Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 17:51, 7 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
CINCPAC should be spelled out on first reference, and abbreviated after.
- Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 17:51, 7 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Any explination as to why the Jig Dog Ramage Award was discontinued after 2009?
- It hasn't been discontinued, but the records have become messy. Will attempt to clean it up. Hawkeye7 (talk) 17:51, 7 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  - I see you've added the 2011 one. Is that all that is available? —Ed!^(talk) 12:25, 9 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
    - I did a bit better than that, but am missing 2008. Hawkeye7 (talk) 18:35, 9 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Dup links tool returns one result: aircraft carrier. Dab links and external links return no problems.
There are no apparent issues with stability. The article is also amply illustrated by properly lisenced illustration.

Placing the article on hold pending fixes. —Ed!^(talk) 16:11, 7 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I think the award missing one year is fine for GA. Passing the article now. —Ed!^(talk) 19:30, 11 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]