Talk:Jalen Duren/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 11:59, 14 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Am taking this review for the GAN March 2021 Backlog Drive. MWright96 (talk) 11:59, 14 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Early years

"He made a name for himself" - not formal writing
AAU should be spelt out in full with the acrnoymns in parentheses
"which he ended up sticking with as he grew older and got better." - focusing on as he grew older and improved his skills.
"during a dominant eighth grade year." - in eighth grade. to be more formal

High school career

"Duren commited to playing at" - playing high school basketball at
Wikilink the terms points, rebounds and blocks to their respective articles for non-Basketball readers who are unfamiliar with such terms on just the first mention
"while shooting 71% as a freshman," - the percentage symbol should be spelt out per MOS:PERCENT
Wikilink buzzer beater
"over regular season champs Archbishop Wood at the Palestra." - formal; champions

National team career

"2017 FIBA Under-16 Americas Championship in Belém, Brazil." - 2019
"He averaged 10.3 points, 8.2 rebounds and 2.0 blocks per game en route to a gold medal and a spot on the tournament all-star five." - all-star five team.

Player profile

"Duren wields influence in the paint" - what does "paint" mean? It is a typo?
"due to his impressive size, strength, athleticism and footwork" - tall height
"His physically imposing frame and shot-blocking talent have drawn comparisons to Bam Adebayo." - who has made the comparisons?
"He is recognized as the best "true post" player in his class," - recognized by whom?
"and has been described as NBA-ready as a tenth grader." - described by whom?

References

The first name of the author of Reference 2 is stated as Alexander not Alex
Reference 4 title "BOYS' BASKETBALL: Jalen Duren Stands Tall as Roman Handles La Salle to Take First Place in Philadelphia Catholic League" - no all capital letters please per MOS:ALLCAPS

Will put the review on hold to allow the nominator to address or query the issues raised above MWright96 (talk) 13:25, 14 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

@MWright96: Addressed most of the concerns but as for your first point in the References section, his name appears as Alex Martin for me. Here is his profile that pops up when you click his name which also shows this. Thank you for your time. JTtheOG (talk) 03:02, 23 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

@JTtheOG: Now promoting to GA class MWright96 (talk) 08:49, 23 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]