Talk:Jack Moline/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Puffin ^{Let's talk!} 19:50, 8 July 2011 (UTC) I didn't know a message was already on the talk page of this article. I'm going to place it on hold for the same reasons as the user posted above.[reply]

First, the lead could be expanded a bit (make each paragraph a bit longer and more detailed) to more adequately summarize the article's content. Next, restructure it. Right now there is one sentence in the family section, and the awards and publications sections are lists. Please remove these subsections, then incorporate this information elsewhere as appropriate. For example, simply state "he wrote and published X book in Y year, and A book in B year" with citations to the book information you already have listed. Write a paragraph that discusses his awards in prose. Try to break the article into subsections according to the stages in his life only (early years, early career, late career or something like that).

I just left a msg on the talk page, but will repeat it here to make sure you see it. I very much appreciate your interest in reviewing the page for the GA nomination, and think your recommendations so far are excellent. Unfortunately, though, all the time I have for wikipedia right now is going into another article: Religious symbolism in the United States military, and just can't work on this Jack Moline article right now. Perhaps I should withdraw the nomination for now? NearTheZoo (talk) 23:32, 18 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Is this review going to be continued? No comments in a month, or at all besides the bit above. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 17:09, 15 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

The issues have not been addressed. Puffin ^{Let's talk!} 17:11, 15 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Just noticed that and was about to remove it. This should be failed since the nom notes he can't get to the concerns. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 17:12, 15 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]