Talk:JKT48/GA1
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Reviewer: Khazar2 (talk · contribs) 01:57, 21 May 2013 (UTC)
I'll be glad to take this review. Initial comments to follow in the next 1-3 days. Thanks in advance for your work on this one! -- Khazar2 (talk) 01:57, 21 May 2013 (UTC)
- As the main editor has been off wiki for about a month (contributions), I'll try and help fix what shortcomings there are with the sources available to me. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 09:23, 21 May 2013 (UTC)
- Great, thanks. -- Khazar2 (talk) 11:44, 21 May 2013 (UTC)
Initial comments
[edit]This looks like high-quality work--thanks, Arsonal, for your work on this. Unfortunately this may be hard to bring up to GA without someone with access to some of the sources that are now dead links. (The dead links themselves aren't a problem, they just leave some questions unanswered.) I made a few tweaks as I went--feel free to revert anything with which you disagree.
- "about half are under the age of 30" -- this seems like a stat that might change or go out of date--worth an "as of 20xx" or "in 20xx"?
- Done. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 08:30, 23 May 2013 (UTC)
- "but production of was hampered" -- needs copyedit
- Removed "of" — Crisco 1492 (talk) 08:30, 23 May 2013 (UTC)
- Some ref harv errors could be cleaned up, but this isn't necessary for the GA criteria.
- Fixed. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 08:30, 23 May 2013 (UTC)
- "unique idol group with Indonesian culture" -- doesn't have a specific inline citation--does this appear in the Japan Times article cited a sentence later?
- Dead link, not on internet archive — Crisco 1492 (talk) 08:30, 23 May 2013 (UTC)
- "the group has yet to generate interest among adults" -- another statement that could use a closer temporal reference ("as of...") per WP:REALTIME
- Not in citation given. Tagging.
- Discussion of the group's music, style, and sales seems like a conspicuous omission. Did their releases receive any kind of reviews or discussion? What are their songs about? What kind of critical/popular response has their stage show gotten? -- Khazar2 (talk) 02:43, 23 May 2013 (UTC)
- Possible to cite, I'll have to look for free time for that though. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 08:30, 23 May 2013 (UTC)
Thanks for the quick responses; that should take care of most of the above. The information not in given citations may need the original nominator to address it, or I suppose we could simply trim it out in a few days if the nominator doesn't return. -- Khazar2 (talk) 11:41, 23 May 2013 (UTC)
- Possible... — Crisco 1492 (talk) 11:45, 23 May 2013 (UTC)
- Doesn't look like I'll have time to dig into their musical style. If the original nominator does not show up, this should be failed. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 22:28, 28 May 2013 (UTC)
- All right. I'll give them another day or two and then close. -- Khazar2 (talk) 01:21, 29 May 2013 (UTC)
- Okay, closing this and not listing for GA at this time. No prejudice against future re-nomination though, if Arsonal or someone else returns and wants to take this the rest of the way; I think it's close in many respects. Thanks for everybody's work. -- Khazar2 (talk) 22:36, 29 May 2013 (UTC)