Talk:Independence from Europe/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Midnightblueowl (talk · contribs) 18:56, 26 June 2017 (UTC)

I appreciate that I am already engaged in reviewing another of this editor's nominations but this is also a subject matter that interests me, so I'll handle this review too, unless there are any objections. Midnightblueowl (talk) 18:56, 26 June 2017 (UTC)

Again, smashing work User:Curlymanjaro. Just a few points. Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:12, 26 June 2017 (UTC)

• "for the single-issue Referendum Party" - it might be worth specifying what that single issue was! Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:12, 26 June 2017 (UTC)

• Done. Borrowed wording and citation from the Referendum Party page if that's alright, I couldn't have stated its purpose better myself.

• "He had been elected as UKIP candidate in the 2004 European Parliament election to represent the West Midlands constituency" - I think that this could benefit from a restructuring. Perhaps "As the UKIP candidate, he was elected as a representative for the West Midlands constituency in the 2004 European Parliament election"? Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:12, 26 June 2017 (UTC)

• Done.

• "had in fact registered" - we could probably go without "in fact". Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:12, 26 June 2017 (UTC)

• Done.

• "who sought re-election in the West Midlands[14] and" - some sort of punctuation break is needed here. Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:12, 26 June 2017 (UTC)

• Done? Added an extra comma.

• "according to author William T. Daniel" - I don't think that "author" is the best term we could use here. Perhaps "political scientist"? Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:12, 26 June 2017 (UTC)

• Done.

• The fourth paragraph in "History" is a bit too lengthy, I think. Consider breaking it in two? Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:12, 26 June 2017 (UTC)

• I'll do you one better, broke into three.

• "unfairly costed them" - costed? "cost", surely? Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:23, 26 June 2017 (UTC)

• Done.

• "damage [his] old " - the last male individual discussed in the prose was Farage, rather than Nattrass, so some confusion might ensue from the use of "his" here. Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:23, 26 June 2017 (UTC)

• Reverted to the original quote by Goodwin, seems to read well.

• "five constituencies, despite previously indicating it would vie for 10" - "five", then "10". Standardise to words (probably best) or numerical figures. Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:23, 26 June 2017 (UTC)

• Done.

• "leaving the party with no official political representation." - do we have a citation for this, by any chance? Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:23, 26 June 2017 (UTC)

• I wish we did. Seen as Nattrass is no longer an MEP and all their Councillors departed, it seemed like an appropriate thing to write. Would be so much easier for me if they just folded.

• @Curlymanjaro: I've had exactly the same thoughts when working on British National Party and (in particular) the National Front (UK). Midnightblueowl (talk) 21:35, 26 June 2017 (UTC)

• "Upon launch in 2013," - Either "Upon its launch" or "Upon launching". Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:23, 26 June 2017 (UTC)

• Done.

• "rules once they'd " - "rules once they had". Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:23, 26 June 2017 (UTC)

• Done.

• It is a shame that we have to rely so much on the party's own manifesto for its policies, rather than academic sources, but it does seem that the latter just do not exist. Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:23, 26 June 2017 (UTC)

• Indeed it is, I've done my best with it. Frustrating, really...

Thanks so much for picking my nominations up Midnightblueowl, starting with this one, let me know if any of the changes are insufficient. Curlymanjaro (talk) 21:19, 26 June 2017 (UTC)

Anyway, fantastic job Curly. Great to see someone else putting in the time and effort to seriously improve UK political party articles. I think that this article passes all the GA criteria and will be happy to pass this. Midnightblueowl (talk) 21:40, 26 June 2017 (UTC)

Indeed Couldn't agree more. Well done. Emeraude (talk) 11:42, 30 June 2017 (UTC)