Talk:Illbleed/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: TheJoebro64 (talk · contribs) 15:58, 27 March 2023 (UTC)

I'll claim this. JOEBRO⁶⁴ 15:58, 27 March 2023 (UTC)

OK here's what I have to say:

• I think the gameplay section could benefit from a little restructuring. You mention items a lot before you actually explain what the items are and what purpose they serve. Basically I think the last paragraph needs to be moved earlier than the two bigger ones, perhaps integrated into the first paragraph.

I don't think I mention any items before that final paragraph (after my edits), but I moved it towards the top.

• If possible, I'd add a reference for the alternate endings bit in plot. It's not necessary, but alternate endings are the kind of thing that I'd say would benefit from having refs to verify them.

I looked and looked but cannot find a direct source. I edited to make it less like a game guide and found a source about the true ending.

• I think you need to clarify that Sega had been involved with and published Blue Stinger since it's otherwise unclear why they'd ask for a sequel.
• Likewise, I'd clarify that Blue Stinger and Illbleed were developed for the Dreamcast in development.

Above two done

• I've added a {{Clarify}} tag in reception. What were the tropes that critics felt it strayed from?

Clarified. Not so much tropes as just similar gameplay.

• GameSpy and GameSpot observed that the game was self-aware of how cheesy it was I think "cheesy" is too informal for an encyclopedia, I'd replace or reword it (I didn't because I wasn't sure if you meant "campy" or "cheap")

Fixed to camp

That's what I've got. Overall a solid article, just needs some tightening up. I did some copyediting I assumed would be uncontroversial as I read. JOEBRO⁶⁴ 16:18, 1 April 2023 (UTC)

@TheJoebro64: Thank you for taking a look TarkusAB^talk/contrib 03:13, 3 April 2023 (UTC)

OK looks good, passing JOEBRO⁶⁴ 13:21, 3 April 2023 (UTC)