Talk:I Did It, Mama!/GA1
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Reviewer: MarioSoulTruthFan (talk · contribs) 17:58, 28 May 2016 (UTC)
Hello, I'm User:MarioSoulTruthFan and I'll be reviewing this article. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 17:58, 28 May 2016 (UTC)
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[edit]"I Did It, Mama!" is a song recorded by Romanian recording artist → recorded, recording...replace "recording artist" with singer-songwriter.for her eponymous second studio album, Alesta (2016). → which one was the first?
I'm not getting this at all. Isn't it her fourth album overall? Which one was the first eponymous album?
David Ciente, while the writing → David Ciente. The writing (sentence is too long, any other suggestion is acceptance after I see it.)- the recording → the record.
- What did the reviewers said regarding this song? Mixed opinion, positive, criticism?
Should include the chart peak.
- "I Did It, Mama!" was met with negative to positive reviews, with music critics calling it catchy "an earworm" and "great", and others naming it "boring" and not radio-friendly. →...it was met with mixed reviews? Link music critics. Rephrase the rest of the sentence. Did any critic called it catchy or are those your words?
Composition and lyrical interpretation
[edit]confessed about the song that → doesn't flow properlyShe as well named → She has, as well, named
Done
Critical response
[edit]Flawless.
Music video and promotion
[edit]The first paragraph should come as the third and the last, since the name of the section is "Music video and promotion".- where it has since amassed over 11 million views → remove this, is not a milestone.
- "Stan particularly confessed about it that" → Stan particularly confessed that
"recommending its watching" → I don't like how it sounds, rephrase.- Romanian tabloids Cancan and Click! → tabloids are not a reliable source, can't you find others?
- Well, after I made a research, I now know these aren't tabloids; they're newspapers. And no, I can't find other sites talking about this.
Just replace the word "tabloids" for newspapers and wiki link it.
commending that → commending
Done
Credits and personnel
[edit]"Bogdan Daragiu – director" of what?link "director of photography"
Done
Track listing
[edit]Archive our found the archives to those links. Itunes is great but they tend to "die" every now and then.
Done
Charts
[edit]col-begin; col-2 → What are these templates doing there?Secondly, why do I have an audio file instead of a website with the charts positions? It should be compiled with the podcast templates parameters. See: Template:Cite podcast.
Done
Release and radio history
[edit]Radio history it's part of the promotion so no need for that.- Needs prose regarding everything. Maybe a new section called "release and promotion"?
- I think this is not needed, as the single was released on almost the same dates worldwide. If I would create this section, then it would contain maybe max. 2-3 sentences, which would be too short.
Then just add that little prose on top of of this section like this Treasure (Bruno Mars song)#Release.
Radio airplay table needs to have the same size as the others.Once again, archive the links.
Done
External links
[edit]Forbidden website. 404 error → replace it with the lyrics from a license provider (metro lyrics).
Done
Overall GA review
[edit]Some fixes that can be easily achieved in no time. Good luck, I will put it on hold for a week. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 18:32, 28 May 2016 (UTC)
- @MarioSoulTruthFan: Solved all your problems with some abbrevations. Best, Cartoon network freak (talk) 20:24, 28 May 2016 (UTC)
- @MarioSoulTruthFan: Done your comment; the lyrics are from DirectLyrics, as Metro Lyrics actually don't have the song's lyrics. Cartoon network freak (talk) 20:34, 28 May 2016 (UTC)
- Gladly passing. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 21:11, 28 May 2016 (UTC)
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.