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Article milestones
DateProcessResult
March 4, 2021Good article nomineeListed
March 18, 2021Good topic candidatePromoted
Current status: Good article

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GA Review

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This review is transcluded from Talk:Hush'd Be the Camps To-Day/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Vami IV (talk · contribs) 02:18, 3 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]


Opening statement

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Hello, and come what may from this review, thank you for your contributions to Wikipedia. During the review, I may make copyedits, which I will limit to spelling correction and minor changes to punctuation (removal of double spaces and such). I will only make substantive edits that change the flow and structure of the prose if I previously suggested and it is necessary. The Nominator(s) should understand that I am a grammar pedant, and I will nitpick in the interest of prose quality. For responding to my comments, please use  Done,  Fixed, plus Added,  Not done,  Doing..., or minus Removed, followed by any comment you'd like to make. I will be crossing out my comments as they are redressed, and only mine. A detailed, section-by-section review will follow. –♠Vami_IV†♠ 02:18, 3 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Claiming this review as quid pro quo for Harry F. Sinclair House. –♠Vami_IV†♠ 02:18, 3 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

@Eddie891: It is time. –♠Vami_IV†♠ 05:10, 4 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks, Vami IV! I think I've responded to all of your points, let me know if there's anything unresolved Eddie891 Talk Work 12:46, 4 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Prose

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  • Whitman was inspired to write the poem by real life experiences. An understatement... and aren't all poets?
  • [...] which inspired them into silence. I'd advise "stunned into silence".
  • Although the poem is narrated as a witness of Lincoln lying in state [...] Consider "from the point of view of a witness"?
  • [...] Whitman himself likely never observed it personally. Considering this is a time before film, I'd have used "likely didn't see it personally."
  • The line in Footnote A, the shovel'd clods that fill the grave, is not used in the version of the poem in the article.
  • There are exactly one instance of shortenings "Hush'd" and "This Dust" each in the article.

Referencing

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  • The dates in the citations are not standardized.
  • There are books and journals that have their full syntax in the citations rather than "Bibliography".

GA progress

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()
3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()
Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed
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