Talk:Hassan Maatouk/GA1

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Reviewer: Kosack (talk · contribs) 13:57, 6 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

I'll take this one on, will post review as soon as possible. Kosack (talk) 13:57, 6 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Initial review

Infobox

Out of interest, where are his Lebanon under-20 stats coming from as I can't see any other mention of it other than here?

Done I also forgot where I found the statistics, then I remembered that I took them from Transfermarkt. I have removed them. Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 14:52, 6 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

It's up to you if you want to keep a link to Lebanon in the lead as as argument could be made that's it's not particularly obvious so WP:OVERLINK may not apply. However, if you are going to keep it, link Lebanese in the opening sentence rather than the mention in the second paragraph.

Done Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 15:03, 6 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

"He won a total of 11 trophies for his team" > 11 trophies with his team.

Done Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 15:03, 6 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Link Lebanese Elite Cup in the second paragraph.

Done Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 15:03, 6 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

"Maatouk scored a total of 20 goals for his country", past tense? Has he stopped playing internationally?

Done Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 15:03, 6 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

There's potential for expansion here for the national team, qualifying for their first ever Asian Cup for example.

Done Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 15:03, 6 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

2004-05: Debut Season

"Maatouk scored three goals in the 2005 AFC Cup" > Maatouk also scored...

Done Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 15:06, 6 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

The final sentence here can be adjoined to the one above, no need for it to be out on its own.

Done Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 15:06, 6 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

"as well as a Lebanese FA Cup", this could be expanded on. "as well as helping his side win the Lebanese FA Cup after defeating Olympic Beirut 2-1 in the final"?

Done Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 15:06, 6 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

2005–09: First league title and domestic treble

Link hat-trick.

Done Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 15:09, 6 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

"as well as being nominated Player of the Season" > as well as being nominated for the Player of the Season Award? Also, the source provided (15) doesn't seem to support this as it only shows awards he won during the 2009-10 season.

Done I seem to have confused the 2008-09 award with the 2009-10 one. Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 15:09, 6 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

2011–12: First season in the UAE Pro League

"he scored six goals for his club, as well as a brace on his club debut", can drop the second use of club here.

Done Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 15:10, 6 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

2012–13: Second season in the UAE Pro League

Probably worth pointing out that he never played for Emirates Club.

Done Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 15:12, 6 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

2013–14: UAE First Division

Section is a little short to be under a heading of its own. If it can't be expanded I'd merge it with the one below.

Done Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 15:19, 6 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Source for promotion?

Done Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 15:19, 6 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

2014–16: Promotion and stay in the UAE Pro League

Final sentence of the second paragraph is unsourced.

Done Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 15:21, 6 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

International career

End of the section is unsourced.

Done Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 15:22, 6 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

References

There are quite a few authors, publishing dates and accessdates that are missing here, ref 54 for example just states LebanonFG? What's that?

LebanonFG is a website (lebanonfg.com). I have personal contacts with the author of the website, however he didn't mention that particular statistic on his website. Would simple citing the website be enough, or should it be removed completely? Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 15:33, 6 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

If the website isn't supporting the information then it's not really doing what it's been put there for. Kosack (talk) 20:34, 7 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Some of these references seem potentially unreliable, refs 15 and 65 for example appear to be blogs? Ref 85 seems to be a betting website.

Done Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 15:33, 6 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

A tidy article, nothing major just a few points to adjust. The references do need a tidy and there a couple of possibly questionable sources that need to be addressed. Placed on hold for now. Kosack (talk) 14:32, 6 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

@Kosack thanks for reviewing the article, I hugely appreciate it! Everything should be fixed, except the issue about "LebanonFG" and the missing info in some references. Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 15:34, 6 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Apologies for the slight wait, I'll go through this again later tonight or tomorrow to see how we're looking! Kosack (talk) 18:20, 7 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

There are still a few outstanding issues with the references. LebanonFG was only an example I picked out, there are numerous refs that have information missing that is readily available such as authors, publishing dates, etc. These need to be fleshed out to provide proper attribution. Kosack (talk) 20:34, 7 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

@Kosack don't worry, I'm not in a rush. I appreciate the fact that you are investing your time to review the article, so take all the time you need! I should have sorted out everything now. If there are other problems please let me know. Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 00:02, 8 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

@Nehme1499: I've done another quick run through and some minor copyediting just to tidy some last loose ends. I think we're in much better shape than when we started now and I'm happy the article now meets the GA criteria. Promoting. Kosack (talk) 18:57, 8 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

@Kosack: I can't thank you enough for what you have done! Very professional, quick and efficient. Thanks again, and hopefully we can collaborate again in the near future. Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 21:26, 8 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

No worries, the hard work was all yours! Kosack (talk) 05:34, 9 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]