Talk:HMS Scout (1918)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk · contribs) 17:20, 9 July 2023 (UTC)

Will take a look shortly. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 17:20, 9 July 2023 (UTC)

Prelim

• Long ton, John Brown & Company, Armistice of 11 November 1918, and World War I are duplicated links
  • Removed.
• No edit wars
• Image correctly licensed
• Earwig reports copyvio unlikely

Lede and infobox

• Lede is quite chunky, suggest splitting into two paragraphs
  • I think I see what you mean. I have reworded it so hopefully it flows better.
• I don't think Scout was launched on "34 April 1918"...!
  • Oops. Amended.

Design and development

• Link aft
  • Added.
• "The Beam was..."
  • Added.
• "making the vessel very wet" perhaps this could be changed to something like "causing excess water to come aboard at sea"?
  • Changed.
• "enabled the heavier Mark V 21-inch torpedo to be carried" instead of?
  • The source does not say. I assume a lighter torpedo.

Construction and career

• Link Royal Navy
  • Added.
• "before the Armistice that ended the First World War." is repeated twice in the paragraph
  • Removed the second instance.
• Western Front should be capitalised
  • Capitalised.
• "The fleet was tasked with not simply helping to" > "The fleet was also tasked with helping to...and supporting the..."
  • Changed,
• Cowan is a rear-admiral, not an admiral
  • Changed (and in the lead).
• "was reported to have left" left where?
  • Clarified.
• "left their anchorage" where?
  • Clarified.
• "the British ships reported a hit" all the ships reported a single hit? and what kind of hit?
  • The sources give no more detail.
• "Scout joined the Seventh Destroyer Flotilla" when?
  • Added.
• "by the Wanderer"
  • Removed.
• "the ship ran aground during trials" do we know where?
  • Not exactly, but I have added context to show roughly where.
• "recommissioned on 20 September"
  • Added.
• "landings"
  • Added.
• "on 13 February" 1942 needs to be moved to this date and removed from the succeeding one
  • Moved.
• "the ship formed part of Force B" doing what? for how long?
  • Clarified.

References

• Ref. #26 should be re-formatted to fit the style of the other print sources
  • Reformatted.
• References look good. AGF for print sources.

@Simongraham: That's all I have for now, will await your response. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 23:10, 9 July 2023 (UTC)

• @Pickersgill-Cunliffe: Thank you for your thorough review. I believe I have addressed everything. Please tell me if there is anything else. simongraham (talk) 12:06, 11 July 2023 (UTC)

• @Simongraham: Passing this as satisfying the GA criteria. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 17:26, 11 July 2023 (UTC)