Talk:HMS Redpole (1910)

GA Review

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Reviewer: PizzaKing13 (talk · contribs) 23:45, 24 October 2022 (UTC)

I'll go ahead and review this article. PizzaKing13 (Hablame) 23:45, 24 October 2022 (UTC)

Thank you for picking this up. 15:05, 26 October 2022 (UTC)

Infobox

• List both between perpendicular and overall length
  • Added. I have also added both displacements.

Lead

• "at the start of the war but was transferred to the" → "at the start of the war, and was transferred to the" PizzaKing13 (Hablame) 23:52, 24 October 2022 (UTC)
  • Amended. simongraham (talk) 15:05, 26 October 2022 (UTC)

Design and description

• "240-foot" → "240 ft"
  • Fixed.
• Do we know how many Parsons steam turbines there were?
  • The assumption would be two as there are two shafts, but sister ship Lyra is listed with seven in the text and it is unclear from the sources whether Redpole had a similar set.
• The infobox says the ship had "2 × single BL 4 in (102 mm) guns" while the body says "a single BL 4 in (102 mm) Mk VIII gun". Which is correct? PizzaKing13 (Hablame) 00:02, 25 October 2022 (UTC)
  • Clarified. simongraham (talk) 15:05, 26 October 2022 (UTC)

Construction and career

• When did it join the Second Destroyer Flotilla?
  • Clarified.
• What's the significance of its visit to Aberystwyth?
  • Clarified.
• "before the year was out" → "before the year ended"
  • Amended.
• Add a period after "placed in reserve"
  • Added.
• Add a comma after "This position did not last long"
  • Added.

Pennant numbers

• All good

References

• All good

Image

• Image is good Y, I assume there is no image of the Redpole available PizzaKing13 (Hablame) 23:49, 24 October 2022 (UTC)
  • Unfortunately not that I have found. simongraham (talk) 15:05, 26 October 2022 (UTC)

Overall

• No war edits PizzaKing13 (Hablame) 23:48, 24 October 2022 (UTC)
• Keep the hyphenation of "Beagle-class" and "Acorn-class" and "Tribal-class" and "H-class" consistent throughout the entire article. PizzaKing13 (Hablame) 00:02, 25 October 2022 (UTC)
  • As per Template:Sclass, the difference is whether the form is an adjective or a noun. I believe I have them right, but please do tell me if I have any mixed up. simongraham (talk) 15:05, 26 October 2022 (UTC)
• On topic, covers topic adequately
• NPOV

Final remarks

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

@Simongraham: Just a few changes and I'll pass this article. PizzaKing13 (Hablame) 00:10, 25 October 2022 (UTC)

@PizzaKing13: Thank you for your extensive review. I think the changes have been made. simongraham (talk) 15:05, 26 October 2022 (UTC)

@Simongraham: Everything seems to be done. I'll pass this article now.

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.