Talk:HMS Jamaica (44)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Thurgate (talk) 00:20, 14 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for criteria)

It is reasonably well written.
prose: (MoS):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars etc.:
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Comments

1. was named after the island of Jamaica. Suggest - She was named after the island of Jamaica.

Done.

2. as they flew off airstrikes. Suggest - as they launched airstrikes

Already changed

3. Late in the year she had an extensive refit. Suggest - In late 1944 she had an extensive refit

Reworded.

4. She rejoined Home Fleet. Suggest - She rejoined the Home Fleet,

Done.

5. resultant. Suggest - resulting

Good idea.

5. and engaged by the covering force. Suggest - and were engaged by the covering force

Done

6. barring the Scharnhorst’s path of retreat. Suggest - blocking the Scharnhorst’s path of retreat.

Barring's perfectly appropriate here.

7. and opened fire a half-hour later. Not very clear as to who opened fire. Suggest you clarify it.

Done.

8. They battered the German ship mercilessly. Not the most encyclopedic language I've seen used :) Suggest - you re-word it a tad.

Done.

9. served as part of covering forces for Convoys. Suggest - served as part of the covering forces for Convoys

Good catch

10. island of Wolmi-do defending Inchon before the main landing. Not very clear, could do with re-wording it.

Doen.

11. Suggest making the- Jamaica was sent to refit in Singapore in October and then sailed for home after it was completed- Paragraph a separate sub-section.

Already done. Thanks for the review.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 17:47, 15 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I've put the article on hold for seven days to allow you to address the issues I've brought up. Feel free to contact me on my talk page, or here with any concerns. Thurgate (talk) 00:20, 14 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Nice work Strum. Passed. Thurgate (talk) 17:58, 15 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

The Crown Colony class were not strictly speaking 'light' cruisers, and neither were they 'heavy' cruisers. That distinction applies only to 'Treaty' cruisers at the time the respective treaty was in force. As the various Naval treaties had lapsed by the time Jamaica was commissioned she should be referred to as either 'cruiser' or for the sake of clarity '6 inch-gunned cruiser'.~~Loatesy~~ — Preceding unsigned comment added by 143.167.101.131 (talk) 14:53, 17 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]