Talk:Gwinnett Environmental & Heritage Center/GA1

GA Review

Passed. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 06:46, 10 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]

The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.

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Reviewer: Lee Vilenski (talk · contribs) 21:07, 9 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Hello, I am planning on reviewing this article for GA Status, over the next couple of days. Thank you for nominating the article for GA status. I hope I will learn some new information, and that my feedback is helpful.

If nominators or editors could refrain from updating the particular section that I am updating until it is complete, I would appreciate it to remove a edit conflict. Please address concerns in the section that has been completed above (If I've raised concerns up to references, feel free to comment on things like the lede.)

I generally provide an overview of things I read through the article on a first glance. Then do a thorough sweep of the article after the feedback is addressed. After this, I will present the pass/failure. I may use strikethrough tags when concerns are met. Even if something is obvious why my concern is met, please leave a message as courtesy.

Best of luck! you can also use the {{done}} tag to state when something is addressed. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)}

Please let me know after the review is done, if you were happy with the review! Obviously this is regarding the article's quality, however, I want to be happy and civil to all, so let me know if I have done a good job, regardless of the article's outcome.

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Prose

Lede

Starts two sentences with "the center", we can just say "it" on one of these. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 22:07, 9 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Done - Aoidh (talk) 23:22, 9 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Lede is a bit short, could probably include other parts of the article. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 22:07, 9 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Done - I tried to expand it as best I could in a way that touches on all of the content of the article itself. - Aoidh (talk) 23:22, 9 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]

General

History doesn't seem to cover why it was built in the first place. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 22:19, 9 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Done - Added a sentence that it was "created as an educational facility for Gwinnett County with a focus on environmental issues." - Aoidh (talk) 23:22, 9 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]
will also highlight sustainable construction and environmental technologies. - feels a bit promoy. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 22:19, 9 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Done Reworded it slightly to show that this was the intent if not the result. - Aoidh (talk) 23:22, 9 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]
The building itself is a LEED Gold certified building,[9] and was Gwinnett County's first LEED Gold certified building.[10][11 - could be reworded to not attend the award twice. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 22:19, 9 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Done - Aoidh (talk) 23:22, 9 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Per cent is two words. See WP:% Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 22:19, 9 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Not done WP:% says that "percent" is American English and that "per cent" is British English; this article is written in American English. - Aoidh (talk) 23:22, 9 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]
The building is made of stone and natural pine[12] and is designed to use 75 percent less potable water and 35 percent less energy than a typical building of the same size. - is it because of the stone and pine? Otherwise this sentence makes no sense. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 22:19, 9 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Done Split into two separate sentences. - Aoidh (talk) 23:22, 9 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]
You don't need to link square foot on every use. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 22:19, 9 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Done - Aoidh (talk) 23:22, 9 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]
What is "grading"? Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 22:19, 9 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Done wikilink added to Grading (earthworks). - Aoidh (talk) 23:22, 9 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Same as above for hectares, acres etc. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 22:19, 9 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Done - Aoidh (talk) 23:22, 9 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Be consistent with Oxford commas. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 22:19, 9 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Question: I'm sure it's right in front of me and I'm overlooking it but can you tell me where in the article it's not used? - Aoidh (talk) 23:22, 9 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Overall the paragraphs are very short. A lot can be combined. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 22:19, 9 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Done - Aoidh (talk) 23:22, 9 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]

serves as an event center for events - well, yeah. Of course. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 22:19, 9 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Done That does admittedly sound very silly when you point it out. I reworded it to "venue" which is the more appropriate description anyways. - Aoidh (talk) 23:22, 9 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]

There's a few level three headers that have one or two small paragraphs in them, the header isn't necessary. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 22:19, 9 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Done - Aoidh (talk) 23:22, 9 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Review meta comments

I'll begin the review as soon as I can! If you fancy returning the favour, I have a list of nominations for review at WP:GAN and WP:FAC, respectively. I'd be very grateful if you were to complete one of these if you get time. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 21:07, 9 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]

@Lee Vilenski: thanks for reviewing this. Other than the percent/per cent point and a question I had about the Oxford commas, I believe I've addressed each of the points above, but I'm more than happy to make additional changes as needed. - Aoidh (talk) 23:22, 9 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]

- - My mistake - I should have read the policy before inacting it. I've done the Oxford comma from where I was talking about, but obviously true for all entries. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 06:46, 10 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.