Talk:God Control/GA1

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Reviewer: MarioSoulTruthFan (talk · contribs) 17:23, 14 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox

Add release date of the album
hi-NRG → not on given source (see below)

Done

Lead

and was co-produced by Mike Dean → so is he a producer or co-producer?
It includes experimental pop, disco and hi-NRG sounds → It is an experimental pop, disco and hi-NRG song
critics → music critics + wikilik to music journalism
director of the music video?

Done

Do you mind adding another positive take to the music critic portion here?

I've mentioned the comparisons to 'Bohemian Rhapsody', let me know if it's OK

You are taking it a bit out of context there. Just remove it. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 18:45, 15 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Done

Background and composition

instruments and singing → instruments, singing
(2005); Mike Dean → (2005), as well as Mike Dean
"God Control" was written by Madonna and Ahmadzaï. It was produced by Madonna, Ahmadzaï and Mike Dean → "God Control" was written by Madonna and Ahmadzaï and produced by the latter two along with Mike Dean
It belongs to the Experimental pop, disco and hi-NRG genres → It has been described as an Experimental pop, disco and hi-NRG song
hi-NRG → not on given source

Mentioned on The Guardian source: "God Control was presumably made after an all-nighter on Reddit – a rambling “Wake up sheeple! [...] And all of it set to hi-NRG disco with cascading strings and Daft Punk vocoders"

Musically... → vocodered vocals → add as well, from The Irish Times source

Let me know if how I added it is correct

It is fine. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 18:17, 15 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

What follows is → It is followed by

Done

Reception

critics → music critics
'Bohemian Rhapsody'". → "Bohemian Rhapsody"."

Did this for all reviews as I can't just change one and leave the others. Let me know if it's oK

Its ok. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 15:52, 15 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Done

Background and synopsis

Thousand Oaks shootings.[20][23][25][24] → four source in a row make the text very clunky, lets make a maximum of three
Regarding the statement above, a full stop midsentece would do the trick with the respective sources.
across the screen → remove
The image should appear first

What do you mean @MarioSoulTruthFan:?--Christian (talk) 17:47, 15 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

I mean put the image on top of the section. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 17:52, 15 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

I decided tu put the image there, as it was next to the actual synopsis of the video, but I've changed it.--Christian (talk) 17:56, 15 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Done

Reception

There is no need for the quote box to disrupte another section, it could be above or make it a litlle bit bigger

I left it here as it looked (on my computer) aesthetically pleasing, it didn't 'cut' or overlapped text or the other section. Let me know if I should change it.

So it depends on the screen I see, move it to the top of the section like the previous image. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 18:31, 15 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

All done @MarioSoulTruthFan: (I've also made it a little wider.--Christian (talk) 19:52, 15 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Ryan Reed from Rolling Stone quotes are giving a copyright violation of 54% you need to fix that, use your own words.
Same as previous apply to People magazine quotes but in much lesser degree

Let me know if this and previous points are correct now

using her "platform" to raise awareness → I don't unsertand this, can you explain it?

That's how the sources quotes it; changed it to "bringing awareness", let me know if it's correct

Much better. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 18:31, 15 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Done

Live performances

Madonna then appeared decked in a Revolutionary War attire → not on given source

From Variety Source: ...like when she does the Hustle in the aforementioned Revolutionary War costume during “God Control”

Done

Credits and personnel

Mastering and mixing?

I tried to search for the album's complete credits but I couldn't find them; the liner notes don't list the either. Just the writers, producers and backing vocals

It's fine. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 15:53, 15 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Done

References

Wikilink the first instance of Billboard
Muumuse doesn't strike me as a reliable source, with an entire section dedicated to Britney Spears. So please remove it.
Junkee. Junkee Media → Junkee (it is redudant)
BBC News. BBC → BBC News (same as previous)
thebacklot.com → TheBacklot

Done

External links

Fine

Overall

I had some doubts this could have been a single, ut I have seent the comments above. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 18:32, 15 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

All done with the comments @MarioSoulTruthFan:! I look forward to the rest regarding the music video! Thank you!! --Christian (talk) 15:54, 15 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

All done @MarioSoulTruthFan:! Just have a couple of comments/questions I hope you can clear up :) --Christian (talk) 18:14, 15 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@Chrishm21: three issues to address and then its good to go.

I've fixed the lead section @MarioSoulTruthFan:; what other issues need addressing? o: --Christian (talk) 18:59, 15 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@MarioSoulTruthFan: I think I finally got the reduction of the Rolling Stone 'violation' fixed; let me know if it works. Also, out of topic, but I seem to remember there was a tool here in wiki that helped you see how much quotations you were using on an article, do you know which one is it?--Christian (talk) 19:26, 15 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

It fine now has the quotes are from Maddona and the music video. I have no clue, I'm sorry. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 19:43, 15 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]