Talk:Game of Thrones/GA3

GA Review

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 14:08, 29 August 2016 (UTC)

I'll review this soon. I have read all of the books so I know what I'm on about! JAGUAR  14:08, 29 August 2016 (UTC)

• " include Hadrian's Wall (which became Martin's great Wall)" - why 'great'?

Removed "great" - AffeL (talk) 22:17, 29 August 2016 (UTC)

• "and the sellsword Daario Naharis (Michiel Huisman)" - Daario is played by two actors

Added the other actor(Ed Skrein) - AffeL (talk) 22:17, 29 August 2016 (UTC)

• "About 90 percent of the pilot had to be re-shot, which involved some cast changes and a different director" - the sources mention that different actors were used, you should mention who they were and what roles they played

It is already mentioned in the casting section(Game of Thrones#Casting) - AffeL (talk) 22:17, 29 August 2016 (UTC)

• There's no need for the "US" before the dollar symbol

Fixed - AffeL (talk) 22:17, 29 August 2016 (UTC)

• "The rest of the first season's cast was filled out in the second half of the year." - unsourced

Added source - AffeL (talk) 22:17, 29 August 2016 (UTC)

• "Nina Gold and Robert Sterne are the main casting directors" - this needs to be merged into a paragraph

Done - AffeL (talk) 22:17, 29 August 2016 (UTC)

• "The six seasons filmed so far each consist of ten episodes, with an average runtime of 55 minutes per episode. The series' pilot and every season finale, bar the first, run for more than an hour apiece." - unsourced

I removed this - AffeL (talk) 22:17, 29 August 2016 (UTC)

• "For the second season, shooting of the Southern scenes" - why is southern capitalised

Fixed - AffeL (talk) 22:17, 29 August 2016 (UTC)

• Merge the last three paragraphs of the Filming section into one

Fixed - AffeL (talk) 22:17, 29 August 2016 (UTC)

• "Alik Sakharov was the cinematographer for the pilot. The series has had multiple cinematographers over the course of the series" - not in source

Now sourced - AffeL (talk) 22:17, 29 August 2016 (UTC)

• "For the first three seasons, Paul Engelen was the main makeup designer and prosthetic makeup artist on Game of Thrones, alongside Melissa Lackersteen, Conor O'Sullivan, and Rob Trenton. At the onset of the fourth season, Engelen's team was replaced by Jane Walker and her crew, which is composed of Ann McEwan and Barrie and Sarah Gower." - none of this is mentioned in the source

Added source - AffeL (talk) 22:17, 29 August 2016 (UTC)

• "In 2011, the season one finale, "Fire and Blood", was nominated for a Primetime Emmy Award for Outstanding Special Visual Effects." - unsourced

Added source - AffeL (talk) 22:17, 29 August 2016 (UTC)

• " Additionally, some scenes were produced by Britain-based Peanut FX, Canada-based Spin VFX, and U.S.-based Gradient Effects. The episodes "Valar Morghulis" and "Valar Dohaeris" earned Pixomondo the Primetime Emmy Award for Outstanding Special Visual Effects in 2012 and 2013, respectively." - unsourced

Added source - AffeL (talk) 22:17, 29 August 2016 (UTC)

• "Soundtrack albums for the subsequent seasons have also been published, featuring tracks performed by the bands The National, The Hold Steady, and Sigur Rós." - needs a reference

Added source - AffeL (talk) 22:17, 29 August 2016 (UTC)

• The prose of the Home video section is choppy and the paragraphs need merging to create better flow

Merged and changed a bit - AffeL (talk) 22:17, 29 August 2016 (UTC)

• "the cost ranges up to 25 dollars per month in the United States, up to 26 pounds per episode in the UK, and up to 52 dollars per episode in Australia" - $25, £26, $56

Fixed - AffeL (talk) 22:17, 29 August 2016 (UTC)

• Again, the last paragraphs of the Critical response section needs merging

Done - AffeL (talk) 22:17, 29 August 2016 (UTC)

• Second paragraph of the Awards and accolades section largely unsourced

Added source - AffeL (talk) 22:17, 29 August 2016 (UTC)

• "Overall, Game of Thrones has won 204 industry awards and has been nominated for 581" - unsourced

Every single one of the awards won and nominated has been sourced one by one in (List of awards and nominations received by Game of Thrones). What should I do?. Should I remove that line? - AffeL (talk) 22:17, 29 August 2016 (UTC)

• No dead links

I don't want to fail this again, so I'll leave this on hold until all can be addressed. The prose is generally good and well written, but there are some gaps in paragraphs that disrupt flow. Also, the lack of citations and some incorrect sourcing is a major barrier at the moment. If you have any questions, please let me know. JAGUAR  17:48, 29 August 2016 (UTC)

I fixed all the things you mentioned above - AffeL (talk) 22:17, 29 August 2016 (UTC)

@Jaguar: - AffeL (talk) 22:46, 30 August 2016 (UTC)

Thanks! Promoted. JAGUAR  22:55, 30 August 2016 (UTC)