Talk:Further Sky/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MarioSoulTruthFan (talk · contribs) 01:04, 2 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Hello, I'm here to review your GA nomination. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 01:04, 2 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox

Should have "Alt".

I asked User:DannyMusicEditor for help with this parameter since I was having trouble trying to come up with a good description. Hope his description is appropriate for you. Yeepsi (talk) 21:39, 7 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Done

Lead

is an EP by English rock band Basement → is an EP recorded by English rock band Basement
second album Colourmeinkindness. → date of the release
In July, the Further Sky EP was released → In 28 July, 2014 the Further Sky EP was released
to positive reviews. → and met positive reviews.
This section is quite weak, you need to add some opinion from the reviewers, generalize it. Style of the EP, availability for streaming three days before
After that perhaps two paragraphs?

Done

Background

because of personal commitments → due to personal commitments
later → when?
due to→ because
Andrew's younger brother → Fisher's younger brother
The band explained that they had thought the hiatus... → The band thought the hiatus...

Done

Composition and recording

Basement came together to practice while Henery was home for Christmas in 2013.The practice was initially "just [...] for fun". Although the band had ideas, composing material was accidental according to Henery → so was he at home for Christmas or not? This sentence is a huge mess.
Content with the song, it was recorded with an iPhone. → who was? who recorded it? The entire song or just the raw part of it?

It also needs source. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 13:45, 9 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]

While Henery resided in the US, the rest of the band had composed "Summer's Colour" → While Henery was residing in the US, the rest of the band had composed "Summer's Colour" → where?
You should had rock to the genre section in the infobox as well.
hints → influences
but not far removed from Colourmeinkindness → but not far from Colourmeinkindness

Done

Release

announced for release → announced as the band's next project to be released.
and "Summer's Colour" → and the track "Summer's Colour"
The band toured Australia, and Japan, and at sold out American venues between 26 July and 20 August → Basement toured between 26 July and 20 August in Australia, Japan, and sold out American venues.
the band → Basement
with support from Cloakroom → with Cloakroom and Newmoon as the opening act. (not sure if this is right?)

Done

Reception

Remove the alternative press score of the board, seems bias.
So whats the conclusion were the reviews favorable or not?
He described → LaGambina described
thought the songs were "well put together" → what do you mean?
His only criticism of the EP was that the percussion sounded "a bit cymbal heavy." → The only criticism the reviewer appointed to the EP was the percussion which sounded "a bit cymbal heavy."
thought that the EP → thought the EP
Is Punknews.org a reliable source? I mean look at the name of the reviewer.

It's listed in WP:ALBUM/SOURCE. Yeepsi (talk) 21:39, 7 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Done

Track listing

You claim that all the music was composed by "Basement", so why is there Dan Goudie credited as a producer?

I'm not sure what you mean. Producers don't always write material with bands. Yeepsi (talk) 21:39, 7 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]

When you say composed you mean "writing ad produced by"...MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 13:34, 9 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Could use a "tracklist" column.

Done

Personnel

Use {{spaced ndash}}

Done

Notes and references

Change its name only to references.

Done

Footnotes

Merge it with the section below and keep the name "Footnotes".

Done

References

You have three dead links here, find and archive them.
Make "Sources" a section.
AVOID SHOUTING!!
Some have work and publisher, others have work.

I can't find the publisher for Sputnikmusic, but I've done the rest. Yeepsi (talk) 21:39, 7 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]

You should link AllMusic, Alternative Press, AbsolutePunk, Punknews.org and so on...

Only linked once. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 13:41, 9 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Don't italicize AllMusic, AbsolutePunk, PopMatters, Punknews.org and Sputnikmusic

Done

External links

Fine.

Overall GA review

Do not make any changes until I say so.
@Yeepsi: The article has more issues than I expected, but nothing serious. On hold for seven days, good luck. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 21:17, 2 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for taking this! Apologies for not working on this sooner, I've had little internet access this past week. Yeepsi (talk) 20:11, 7 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I've done almost every point, apart from the Track listing points and the dead links (I'll fix the links tomorrow since archive.org isn't working for me at the moment). Yeepsi (talk) 21:39, 7 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Yeepsi: I will give you a couple more days to finish what's missing or what has to be address yet. Good luck. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 13:42, 9 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I've done the remaining points. Yeepsi (talk) 14:19, 9 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I Have an indecision regarding using a "trakclist" column with only three tracks. Can you give me an example of a GA or FA article like this? MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 16:58, 9 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Do you mean the track listing template? If so, Stop Crying Your Heart Out and Transfusion (EP) don't use the template. Yeepsi (talk) 17:15, 9 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]

The latter example. Now passing MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 17:31, 9 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]