Talk:Frontier Central School District/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 05:09, 17 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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Copy changes

, however after 1972 district enrollment began declining — change the comma to a semicolon, add a comma after "however", and move "after 1972" to the end of this block

Done

document storage, — remove comma

Done

The school offers over two dozen clubs and activities, over 64 varsity sports teams, and began operating a student-run food truck in 2019 — Change the first comma to an "and" and remove the second.

Done

The first expansion was in 1993... — Remove the comma after "gymnasium", as "the second in 1998" is not a complete sentence. A ", and" joins two sentences that would otherwise stand alone.

Good to know, thank you

all students living within 15 miles (24 km) of the school that they attend — unsure what is meant here, there's a missing verb

I looked at the district policy again, and it doesn't make sense to me what they're saying. So I removed it.

Other notes

Almost all the references are archived. Consider running IABot again for the rest (presumably these were added after or missed by the bot itself, which I know to happen).

For some reason the bot isn't working, but I'll go back and try something else

I'm left wondering if listing the current principal of each school might be the one place where this gets too detailed? (Certainly the assistant principals are too much!) The by-school summaries are good otherwise. Since it's been a while since you worked on this, it might be worth giving a once-over to find any other elements that could be cruft.

I removed them as it get repetitive

Copyvio tool catches little more than school names.

Great to hear

The images by you are fantastic and great work. They're all appropriately tagged, as is the fair use logo in the infobox. The images really add a sense of place to the page that otherwise would be lost.

Thank you very much!

This is a model article on a school district otherwise. It's almost there. Dekema, I'm putting this on hold to address the copy changes suggested above and anything else you find that would be worth a second look coming back to this after three months. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 05:56, 17 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]

@Sammi Brie: I think I'm done with the article for now, minus taking additional pictures. Do you have other suggestions? dekema (Formerly Buffaboy) (talk) 04:00, 31 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Nope! I just passed it. It looks great. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 04:03, 31 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the review! dekema (Formerly Buffaboy) (talk) 04:48, 31 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]