Talk:Freddy Galvis

Freddy Galvis was one of the Sports and recreation good articles, but it has been removed from the list. There are suggestions below for improving the article to meet the good article criteria. Once these issues have been addressed, the article can be renominated. Editors may also seek a reassessment of the decision if they believe there was a mistake.

Article milestones
Date	Process	Result
March 30, 2015	Good article nominee	Listed
November 27, 2023	Good article reassessment	Delisted

A fact from this article appeared on Wikipedia's Main Page in the "Did you know?" column on March 4, 2015.

The text of the entry was: Did you know ... that Philadelphia Phillies infielder Freddy Galvis participated in the Little World Series and subsequently, at age 16, signed his first contract?

Current status: Delisted good article

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GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:Freddy Galvis/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Coemgenus (talk · contribs) 12:03, 30 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

If the Phillies aren't going to have a good season, they may as well have some good articles. I'll review this one over the next couple days. --Coemgenus (talk) 12:03, 30 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Checklist

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, no copyvios, spelling and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Comments

Lede

Should probably link PEDs.
"potentially a candidate" could probably just be "potentially" or "a candidate", not both.

Early life

A pet peeve: "before" is almost always better than "prior to". If you disagree, that's fine, I certainly won't hold this up over such a minor point, but I think it improves the writing.

Minor league career

"Galvis participated in the Florida Instructional League in 2006 before he began his professional career in 2007..." Two issues here. Is the Florida Instructional League not professional? Also: the sentence is long, would be better as two sentences.
"The subsequent May..." sounds strange. Maybe "The following May..." Or ""That May..."
"Subsequently, Galvis was promoted to the Triple-A...." It might be better just to say when he was promoted. Like "In June [or whenever it was], Galvis was promoted...."

Major league career

"...eventually diagnosed as a Pars fracture in his back." To avoid saying "diagnosed" twice in the same sentence, I'd change this to "discovered to be" or something similar.

Player profile

"...Phillies' writer Michael Baumann,..." You already introduce Baumann in the previous paragraph.

Personal life

"...ostensibly susceptible..." "Ostensibly" stands out here, probably because you used it already in an earlier paragraph. Maybe "thought to be" is a good substitute?

Fixed Thanks for the speedy review. All were great suggestions. Go Phightins! 13:50, 30 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]
- Wow, this was a quick one. I can't see anything else that needs fixing. Nice work. Let's go Phils! --Coemgenus (talk) 14:10, 30 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Possibly free image

[1] Other images of this guy are free; don't have time to investigate now, but this one might be. Go Phightins! 01:41, 14 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]

GA Reassessment

Freddy Galvis

The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.

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Result: concerns with inadequate detail ~~ AirshipJungleman29 (talk) 23:24, 27 November 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Post-2015 career needs more information and suffers from oversectioning. Uncited text throughout, and "Player profile" might need an update. Z1720 (talk) 15:00, 9 November 2023 (UTC)[reply]

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.