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Good articleFred Dyer has been listed as one of the Sports and recreation good articles under the good article criteria. If you can improve it further, please do so. If it no longer meets these criteria, you can reassess it.
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DateProcessResult
June 30, 2012Good article nomineeListed
Did You Know
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The text of the entry was: Did you know ... that Welsh boxer Fred Dyer (pictured) would entertain spectators by singing and playing the ukulele after a boxing match?

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Reviewer: Wizardman (talk · contribs) 05:15, 29 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I'll review this article shortly. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 05:15, 29 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Here are the issues I found:

  • Given the size of the article, the lead should at least be two paragraphs.
 Done, but may need a reread. FruitMonkey (talk) 16:05, 30 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Boxing magazine, reported in January 1910, that his fight against" neither comma needed.
 Done FruitMonkey (talk) 14:14, 30 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • "but the fight with Emden was to end in defeat and would affect his future boxing career." the voice feels a little overly passive here; reword to make more active.
 Done FruitMonkey (talk) 15:14, 30 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • "The injury to his right plagued" his right knee
 Done FruitMonkey (talk) 14:16, 30 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • "- who would later become British and European middleweight champion - " I presume these are meant to be mdashes; fix them.
 Done FruitMonkey (talk) 14:29, 30 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Uses of twenty round should be changed to 20 round per MOSNUM.
 Done FruitMonkey (talk) 14:10, 30 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • "setting up a boxing fund for injured soldiers in Sydney;[28] and " comma instead of semicolon
 Done FruitMonkey (talk) 14:31, 30 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Dyer's persistency eventually paid off," persistence
 Done FruitMonkey (talk) 14:16, 30 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • "A match was made but Lewis damaged a finger" that sounds a little odd; perhaps injured it?
 Done FruitMonkey (talk) 14:54, 30 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • "In late 1917 Dyer faced Tommy Robson again, in two" no comma needed.
 Done FruitMonkey (talk) 14:30, 30 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • "and in the later half of 1919" latter half
 Done FruitMonkey (talk) 14:11, 30 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • "A fight against Jim Slater in January 1922 is believed to be his last bout." I'd prefer a cite for this.
 Done Although I dislike using Boxrec as a source it is the best available for this info.FruitMonkey (talk) 15:12, 30 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • The boxing record section should be sourced.
 Done I have added three cites to this section. None make the challenge that it is incorrect, but it is one that is made on several blogs. I believe it is worth adding as it stops others from including this information which is now believed incorrect. FruitMonkey (talk) 21:46, 30 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I'll put the article on hold and iwll pass when the issues are fixed. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 18:31, 29 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Everything looks good now, so I'll pass the article. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 22:57, 30 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
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