Talk:Franz Halder/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: CPA-5 (talk · contribs) 18:56, 7 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Do this one tomorrow, also can you tell me which English you use here? Cheers. CPA-5 (talk) 18:56, 7 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

British English, I believe. --K.e.coffman (talk) 21:46, 7 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

It looks like there are some little template issues in the article like this sentence Barbarossa Decree and the Commissar Order. He was sent[by whom?] or this one politicians and eventually for millions[quantify] of Americans.[citation needed]. I will continue if they are fixed. Cheers. CPA-5 (talk) 18:25, 10 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

I've addressed the above issues. K.e.coffman (talk) 18:41, 10 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

I'll continue later I just finished the lead and the infobox. Cheers. CPA-5 (talk) 15:19, 11 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

the 1941 invasion of the Soviet Union Link the USSR.
command of his father and served in World War I (1914-1918) --> "command of his father and served in World War I (1914–1918)".
included the imprisonment or execution of Poles Link Poles.
planning for the Axis invasion of the Soviet Union which began Unlink the USSR.
during the Battle for Moscow in the winter of 1941-1942 --> "during the Battle for Moscow in the winter of 1941–1942".
to light that he had been involved in an earlier plot Is there a link to that plot?
US v. U.S.. Please standardise the usage of the US.
Myth of the clean Wehrmacht is overlinked.
The Soviet Union is overlinked.
succeeded in his aim of exonerating the German army --> "succeeded in his aim of exonerating the German Army".

Body

Halder was born in Würzburg, the son of an officer. In 1902 Do we know his father's name?
he was appointed as chief of staff of a military district Which military district?
After being promoted to generalmajor in October 1934 --> "After being promoted to generalmajor (general-major) in October 1934".
Halder was promoted to generalleutnant --> "Halder was promoted to generalleutnant (lieutenant-general)".
on the General Staff of the Army, in Berlin Unlink Berlin because of common term.
the Army High Command on 1 September 1938. He succeeded General Ludwig Beck Remove 1938.
development of the invasion plans of France Unlink France because of common term.
Halder was promoted to generaloberst and began --> "Halder was promoted to generaloberst(colonel-general) and began".
economy or the administration led by Stalin --> "economy or the administration led by Joseph Stalin".
During that summer Hitler and the Army Staff led by Halder Try to avoid to use seasons. Cheers. CPA-5 (talk) 13:36, 13 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

More to come

Remove all the seasons.
withdrawal, when it came, was dictated by the Soviet army Soviet Army.
worst events in the history of the German army Same as above but now with the German one.
World War I is overlinked.
that included former French premier Leon Blum --> "that included former French Premier Leon Blum"
In the last days of April 1945, together with other Remove 1945.
Nazi-Soviet war in which the German army fought a "noble war" German Army.
section of the research program which became known American program.
were recorded by former field marshal Georg von Küchler Field Marchel.
distance himself and the German army from Hitler German Army.
absolving himself and the German army from war crimes Same as above.
individuals like Halder, Hermann Göring and Heinz Guderian First remove Heinz and second unlink Heinz Guderian because it is overlinked. I'll do the source and image reviews tomorrow. Cheers. CPA-5 (talk) 18:46, 17 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
His aim was to exonerate German army personnel German Army and replace "his aim was" to "He aimed".
No edit war.

Infobox

Years: "1902–42" --> "1902–1942".
Rank: "Generaloberst" --> "Generaloberst (Colonel-General)".

Sources

Ref 1, I do not think we should add the whole ref over there I believe if a page number is good enough.
In Megarge's source, "Polish troops and armed civiians were certain to" typo?

I've addressed the above points. In re: "Do we know his father's name?", "Which military district?" and which conspiracies, the source does not specify. K.e.coffman (talk) 19:49, 14 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

No OR.
"Lebendiges Museum Online" add a languages=German in the source.
Citino, Robert --> Citino, Robert M.
Some ISBNs have more than one hyphen others have only one hyphen maybe standardise them all.
Add languages=German in Hartmann's source and translate the title.
Megargee's book hasn't a location?
Try not to overlink the publishers and writters like both Cambridge and Kansas universities and Stahel, David.

Images

Looks good to me.

I just finished the review, I'll set it on hold. Cheers. CPA-5 (talk) 08:40, 18 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

I've addressed the remaining points. I'm not sure about "Remove all the seasons" -- that's what the sources say. The events are taking place in Europe; I don't think anyone would get confused. Hartmann's book is not available in English and I don't feel comfortable offering my translation. --K.e.coffman (talk) 01:48, 21 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

That's why I reckoned you to try to avoid it I think I can pass it. Cheers. CPA-5 (talk) 11:05, 22 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]