Talk:Faces (Star Trek: Voyager)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Miyagawa (talk · contribs) 20:26, 26 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Grabbing for a review. Had a quick skim already - looks really good. Miyagawa (talk) 20:26, 26 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Miyagawa: Thank you! Aoba47 (talk) 21:13, 26 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

There are a couple of links to User:Aoba47 that need fixing. Mr Stephen (talk) 21:55, 26 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Mr Stephen: Thank you! I apologize for the silly mistake on my part. I previously worked on this in my sandbox, and forgot to remove the links when transferring it over here. I have removed the links. Aoba47 (talk) 21:57, 26 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I thought it would be something like that. Mr Stephen (talk) 09:10, 27 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Ok, let's get the review started.

Lead: Duplicate link to Biller in the first paragraph (also in the infobox)

Fixed.

"The episode received Nielsen ratings of 6.1/10 percent, and saw a decrease from the previous week" - you could switch the comma for a semicolon and remove "and saw"

Fixed.

Plot: "is deemed to ill to work" - "too" rather than "to"

Fixed.

Link to USS Voyager (Star Trek) towards the end of the second paragraph.

Fixed.

"caught for communicating to Voyager" - I think "with" would be better than "to"

Fixed.

Writing: Would it be possible to mention when the Vidiians were first introduced? (in Phage (Star Trek: Voyager)) Third paragraph would be the most appropriate location.

Fixed.

Separation of B'Elanna Torres: "The cast and crew pent some time" - I presume "spent"

Fixed.

"while the Klingon did not have logic r control" - is that "logic or control"?

Fixed.

"actress Joy Kilpatrick was casted as Dawson's" - just cast; apparently casted fell out use in the middle ages (although I'm sure we have a Wiki for that version of English!)

Fixed.

Critical reception: Pipe a link at TrekToday through to TrekNation

Fixed.

@Aoba47: No other issues found. The free use image is a good choice and located in the optimum position. It's mostly use a bunch of typos. Will be happy to pass this when you've taken a look - a good job and interesting read. Miyagawa (talk) 12:41, 27 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Miyagawa: Thank you for your review! I have addressed all of your comments. Please let me know if there is anything that I can do. Aoba47 (talk) 15:26, 27 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Great, happy to promote to GA. Miyagawa (talk) 16:09, 27 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Miyagawa: Thank you! Aoba47 (talk) 16:09, 27 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

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