Talk:Erna P. Harris/GA1

GA Review

Passed. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 22:57, 18 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

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Reviewer: BennyOnTheLoose (talk · contribs) 16:50, 17 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for picking this one up BennyOnTheLoose. Looking forward to collaborating with you again. SusunW (talk) 17:04, 17 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a. (prose, spelling, and grammar):

b. (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a. (reference section):

b. (citations to reliable sources):

c. (OR):

d. (copyvio and plagiarism):
It is broad in its coverage.
a. (major aspects):

b. (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):

b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/fail:

(Criteria marked are unassessed)

Images

All are relevant and public domain. Positioning is fine. A shame that the infobox pic isn't a bit clearer, but given the limitations of working with only free or fair use images, at least there are pictures to enhance the article.

I know, frustrating, but George did a great job to make them better than they originally were. SusunW (talk) 22:32, 17 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Captions: I couldn't see a source for her signature beret? (Edwards, Eleanor (June 5, 1978b) seems to fit the bill.) Is it worth adding a note about Harris's location in the Sunflower staff pic (or maybe including a version of the info from the ALT text about her being the only Black woman on the Sunflower staff?

I cannot believe I left out that little jewel, but I've added it and her location (didn't want to overdo stating she was the only Black). SusunW (talk) 22:32, 17 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Good alt text. Should there be a comma after the only Black woman in the Sunflower staff ALT text?

Yes, added. SusunW (talk) 22:32, 17 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Copyvio check

I reviewed the matches above 10% found using Earwig's Copyvio Detector. No issues. A couple of phrases are repeated from the Discover Nikkei and OAC sources, but only ones which are OK per WP:LIMITED, e.g. born on June 29, 1908, in Kingfisher, Oklahoma, the internment of Japanese Americans
No issues encountered from the sources I reviewed.

Early life and education

Her father was a postman and pacifist. Optionally, this could be reworded as the current form sort of gives the two roles an equivalence.

Reworded. Better? SusunW (talk) 23:22, 17 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Although he did not own a gun, he routinely opposed the actions of the local Ku Klux Klan - I haven't seen the Intondi source, but this formulation looks slightly odd to me, as I wouldn't expect opposition to the KKK to require a gun. Is there more context to this in the Intondi source?

Not in Intondi, but I mistakenly thought the US gun culture would be "common knowledge". Oklahoma, "the last frontier" and home of the "wild west" (although it culturally is also part of "the south") is high on that list. (Whenever I travel and am asked where I am "from" I am always asked if I ever saw a cowboy and if people really walk around wearing six-shooters. The answer is yes to cowboy, it's a real job, and "no" to six-shooters.) She was in school during the Tulsa race massacre and armed resistance was common. If mobs of people are trying to kill you, so the rationale goes, you'd better have a gun and a bigger mob. (Of course since the KKK had members on the police forces and legislatures, violence against violence wasn't likely to stop anything.)[1] Edwards 1978b says he was probably the only man in Kingfisher who didn't have a gun at home. (hmmm, did he have one at work?) Changed it to read Unlike most men in his community, he did not own a gun, but he routinely opposed the actions of the local Ku Klux Klan. Better? SusunW (talk) 23:22, 17 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Spot check on the only Black student in the journalism department - no issues.

Career

and the paper folded Optionally: reword, as this has a literal meaning as well as the intended one.

Used closed. SusunW (talk) 16:59, 18 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Spot check on She wrote feature articles and had a syndicated column, "Reflections in a Crackt Mirror" that was distributed to other markets - not sure that this is really supported by the sources. There's a Detroit Tribune source that mentions "for LATF", but I'm not sure what that "F" indicates.

"LA Times Features", part of their syndication system. SusunW (talk) 16:59, 18 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Spot check on In 1952, she moved to Berkeley where she operated a duplication and printing shop until her retirement - no issues.

Activism

To end demonstrations, President Harry S. Truman, signed Executive Order 9981 in June 1948 to integrate the United States Armed Forces. - From the one page of the source I can see, it's hard to tell whether this is really a fair statement. It's consistent with the source, so I'm not saying is has to be changed, but I wonder if there was more to this than just the prevention of demonstrations.

Of course there was more to it. It was totally political. Truman assumed the presidency when FDR died and ran for his own elected term in 1948. He was not expected to win and made campaign promises to deal with racial inequalities. Continuing pressure, from media, demonstrations, meetings by heads of organizations like the NAACP and the Brotherhood of Sleeping Car Porters with Congress, etc. put a lot of pressure on him to keep his promises.[2][3]. I've changed the text. Better? SusunW (talk) 16:59, 18 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

She continued her activism for human rights regardless of whether her positions were popular - as there's only Dellums's statement to the House of Representatives supporting this, it might be better to attribute this to him.

done. SusunW (talk) 16:59, 18 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Death and legacy

Spot checks on After her death, the City of Berkeley named the Erna P. Harris Court, a public housing project located at 1330 University Avenue, in her honor - no issues.

Sources

FamilySearch is listed as "Generally unreliable" at WP:RSP. However, it also states there that the use of some resources there may be OK. As I dont have a subscription, please could you outline what the "Marriage Record: James E. Harris/Frankie A. Prather" is? (E.g. is it a scan of a register entry?)

It is a digitized copy of the official registry volume 2 page 320 of the marriage license application, showing the name, age, race, birth place, and residence of groom and bride, official's certification, followed by the proof that the marriage took place. SusunW (talk) 16:59, 18 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

"Coop Dedication" should be "Co-op Dedication". Otherwise, all OK with the spot check on that source.

done SusunW (talk) 16:59, 18 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

MOS:LEAD states that "As a general rule of thumb, a lead section should contain no more than four well-composed paragraphs". Having six paragraphs in the lead is OK, but perhaps see if any could be combined.

Sorry, the issue of submitting it to DYK before GA review. Drive by editors using mobile devices seem to prefer short paragraphs and often break refs when moving text around. I thought I got them all back together, but missed this. SusunW (talk) 16:59, 18 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Overall

As I expected, an interesting, well researched and well written article. Feel free to quibble with any of my points above. Regards, BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 20:31, 17 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks BennyOnTheLoose. I truly enjoyed learning about her. I very much appreciate your collaboration in improving the article. I think I have addressed everything, but please let me know if anything is unclear or needs more work. Always a pleasure to work with you. SusunW (talk) 16:59, 18 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

I'm satisfied that the article meets the criteria so am passing it. Thanks again, SusunW. Regards, BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 22:56, 18 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

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