Talk:Eppur Si Muove (The West Wing)/GA1
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This article looks pretty decent to me - just a few things that need to be addressed under the Social and cultural references section before it can be passed for GA:
Line, "The title of the episode refers to the president quoting Galileo Galilei, leaving the Roman Inquisition after having recanted his heliocentric theory of the universe. "Eppur si muove" – "And yet it moves"." You should wikilink "heliocentric theory" to the article on heliocentrism.Line, "The advocacy group "Traditional Values Alliance" is a poorly veiled version of the real-life "Traditional Values Coalition"." You appear to be abbreviating the "Traditional Values Coalition" as "TNC" throughout the article - surely this is a typo and it should be "TVC"? It's usually a good idea when using an acronym to put it in brackets beside its first appearance in the article i.e. "...a poorly veiled version of the real-life "Traditional Values Coalition" (TVC)".Line "...an allusion to the virulently anti-gay pastor Fred Phelps". Use of the word "virulently" contravenes WP:NPOV; try to find an alternate wording - "stringently" perhaps?- Line "The scene with the First Lady interacting with the Muppets from Sesame Street is probably an in-joke, as Stockard Channing has previously been a character on the show." This is just speculation and, in the absence of a reliably sourced citation, should be removed.
Once you've addressed all of the above, let me know on my talk page and I'll have another look. Good luck! Joe King 15:32, 4 June 2007 (UTC)
- OK, I've marked the items I now think to have been addressed with a strikethrough. Just leaves one concern remaining - unless you can find a cite for Stockard Channing's appearance with the Muppets being an in-joke, you need to reword that paragraph. Joe King 13:49, 10 June 2007 (UTC)
- Which I now notice was fixed this morning! OK, I'm passing this article. Joe King 13:52, 10 June 2007 (UTC)