Talk:Edwin Erickson

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Review: February 20, 2020. (Reviewed version).

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GA Review

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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 14:29, 19 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Criteria

1. Well-written

Prose is clear/concise/understandable

Spelling/Grammar

MOS lead

- Needs a couple more sentences

MOS layout

2. Verifiable

No OR

- The caucuses statement is not supported by the citation given

No COPYVIO

List of references properly formatted

- a bare URL and another missing a parameter

Inline citations from reliable sources

3. Broad in coverage

Covers main aspects

See below

Stays on topic

4. Neutral Y

5. Stable Y

6. Illustrated if possible

Media relevant

Media tagged for copyright status

Comments

Lead - You include the scope of his district in the lead, but not the main body of the article. It should be included in the article, too. In fact, in the main body (not lead or infobox), you don't even mention the district he represented. This should be included in the main body.

Added in body

The lead is a bit brief for a biography GA, is there a way you could give a two or three more sentences?

Added a bit

What is the citation in the lead being used to support? The III suffix?

Moved citation to source date of death

Infobox Items in the infobox should be cited in either the main body of the article or in the infobox. Erickson's residence in Newton Township is not cited in either place.

Added a source

I'm assuming that Bryn Mawr was doing co-ed graduate programs at this point. That's correct, right?

Not sure, but the source (https://justfacts.votesmart.org/candidate/biography/47186/edwin-erickson) says that is where he got his phd

The personal website link takes me to something entirely in Spanish. This link should probably be removed, especially since the subject is deceased.

removed

Biography "he was known for his active in guiding the policy behind" - What does this mean?

Fixed

Pennsylvania Senate - The cited link for the caucuses takes me to the Vote Smart homepage, not the page containing the relevant data for Senator Erickson.

Fixed the link

"Erickson left the Senate in January 2015" - Is this when his term expired? If you, it should probably be phrased as his term expiring. "Left the Senate" can mean many things.

Clarified

Did anything particularly important happen during his senate term? That should be mentioned.

Already included a note about his plan for healthcare clinics, added some more

Who did he run against? He won a special election, we should get a brief description of that election - who did he run against? Was it a close race? Contested primary?

Couldn't find much, added margin

Later life - Both of those paragraphs can probably be combined, they're both rather short.

combined

References

Ref 2 is a bare URL. Also, Legacy.com collects obituaries newspapers, it might be better to get the direct source.

Couldn't find the original source, but removed it since another source verifies the same claim

Refs 2 and 4 need accessdates.

Done one source removed, one access date added

External links - The external link is a duplicate of a reference, and should be removed as it already appears.

removed

That's it. Hog Farm (talk) 15:24, 19 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@Hog Farm: I've taken a crack at fixing the issues you raised - see above. Thanks, --DannyS712 (talk) 22:26, 19 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@DannyS712: - I added a sentence about his EPA regional adminstratorship to the lead. I'm going to pass this as a GA now. Hog Farm (talk) 02:07, 20 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]