Talk:Duncan Robinson/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MrWooHoo (talk · contribs) 18:22, 14 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I'll start this review ASAP. Just before we begin, to sort out confusion, I will have a general review then an in depth prose and source review. In the general review, I'll use the "GA tools" box. Cheers! MrWooHoo (talk) 18:20, 14 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@TonyTheTiger: Overall, just a couple of prose conformity issues and then I'll pass.

General Review

First off, I'll look at the "GA tools" box. No problems except for it showing up with no images which isn't an issue for GA (at least not really).

Rate	Attribute	Review Comment
1. Well-written:
	1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.	See prose review below.
	1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.
2. Verifiable with no original research:
	2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.
	2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).
	2c. it contains no original research.
3. Broad in its coverage:
	3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.
	3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).
	4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.
	5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
	6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content.	You don't have any images in this article, but according to WP:GANOT that's ok. However, I like to prepare GA articles for future FA status, so if you can find one, I'd go for it.
	6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.	See above.
	7. Overall assessment.	~~See comments below.~~

Prose Review

Note: If you have changed the sentence that needed to be corrected, press Enter and start off the line with ::, then use Y or Done If the change was only partially done use Y, and N or Not done if the change could not occur. (If you would explain why, I would be greatly appreciated :P) To see code, go to edit source and copy the code.

"He was the 2014 Division III Rookie of the Year and a Division III All-American according to D3Hoops.com."

Remove D3Hoops.com as I think it's irrelevant.

DoneDone.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 15:07, 16 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"In his early years, he just shot for hours, attempting to make 1600 shots per week."

He just shot for hours sounds kinda odd, maybe remove "just"?

DoneO.K.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 15:09, 16 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

" Crotty had been a two-time All-American at Williams College,[8][9] having served as point guard for the 2003 NCAA Division III Tournament champions (and 2004 Tournament runners up)"

Unlink 2003 and 2004 Tournament as they aren't articles (yet).

Not done I am not sure this is necessary. I think we expect these articles in the future.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 15:37, 16 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

E.g., while BigTen.org only requires a minimum of 1.0 made per game,[26] NCAA.org requires a minimum of 2.5 made per game."

Make the E lower case.

Not doneThis is normal sentence case, I believe, with the first letter of a sentence being capitalized.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 15:27, 16 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Throughout the article, make the numbers into words. See WP MOS.

Done done.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 16:21, 16 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Also, be sure to keep the "introductory comma" uniform throughout the article.

"On January 12 with leading scorer Caris LeVert sidelined, Michigan defeated (#3/#3)[31] Maryland 70–67 as Robinson contributed 17 points on 5–9 three-point shooting. On January 23, Michigan defeated Nebraska 81–68"

DoneFixed.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 15:36, 16 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@TonyTheTiger: Passing now. Apologies for the delay. MrWooHoo (talk) 00:31, 23 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Source Review

No problems with sources, ie no dead links. Good job! MrWooHoo (talk) 18:51, 14 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]