Talk:Delphian Club/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Eddie891 (talk · contribs) 22:46, 11 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Can review Eddie891 ^Talk _Work 22:46, 11 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

@Eddie891: Just checking in. Are you still working on this review? Dugan Murphy (talk) 23:16, 21 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Gah, has it already been ten days! How time flies. Yes, I will make sure to attend to this within the next few days, thanks for the reminder. Eddie891 ^Talk _Work 23:31, 21 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

And my sincere apologies for not being more on top of things. Eddie891 ^Talk _Work 23:31, 21 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

No problem. Happens to the best of us. Dugan Murphy (talk) 00:03, 22 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

OK, sources all seem reliable, images are licensed OK. Seems relatively comprehensive, at least for GA purposes. Eddie891 ^Talk _Work 01:16, 22 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Some thoughts on prose

Why is Neal the only member specifically highlighted in the lede?

My thinking is that Neal is the most famous of the club members, even though he is nevertheless fairly unknown today. Let me know if you have more thoughts on this. Dugan Murphy (talk) 16:34, 22 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

What does "but no more than nine served at a time" 'served' mean in this context?

I reworded this use of "served" in the lede and in the body. Let me know if still think it's unclear. Dugan Murphy (talk) 16:34, 22 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

"is supposed to be" what does 'supposed' mean in this context? Presumably the members didn't actually think that

Correct. Let me know if you think my rewording is still unclear. I'll look at the remaining comments in a bit. Dugan Murphy (talk) 16:34, 22 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Why use "hebdomadal" instead of just "weekly"?

I just added some extra wording to make that more clear. Let me know if it could still improve. Dugan Murphy (talk) 18:02, 22 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

" regular contributions from members" monetary or literary?

Literary. I changed the word to "submissions" to make that more clear. Dugan Murphy (talk) 18:02, 22 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

"Neal's reflected his reputation" maybe say what it was here as well?

Done. Dugan Murphy (talk) 18:02, 22 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

"hen the club flourished most" how so?

Reworded to say "most active and festive". Dugan Murphy (talk) 18:02, 22 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Do we know if any of the "prominent men" accepted the offer?

They didn't. Just added that. Dugan Murphy (talk) 18:02, 22 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

The character of Mr. Snap is a satire of John Neal and the story "Raising the Wind; or Diddling Considered as One of the Exact Sciences" is a satire of Neal's writing for the club and later in The Yankee. how is this relevant to the delpgian club?

Reworded. Let me know if the connection is still unclear. Dugan Murphy (talk) 18:02, 22 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

I'm not sure any of the examples besides Poe's could really be construed as mentions in popular culture since it's all members of the group-- maybe they would be better integrated into the 'history' section? Maybe not

I'm inclined to agree. I've integrated the non-Poe content from this section into the history section, which led to me reordering a few things in that section. I think this is an improvement. Dugan Murphy (talk) 18:02, 22 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Perhaps some more to follow. Eddie891 ^Talk _Work 01:27, 22 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Great. Thanks for the comments! I think this article is better as a result. Let me know if you have more. Dugan Murphy (talk) 18:02, 22 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

OK, this would seem to meet the GA criteria now, passing. Eddie891 ^Talk _Work 22:55, 24 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]