Talk:Dave Martinez/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: EricEnfermero (talk · contribs) 12:49, 4 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]

I'm happy to begin reviewing this in the next few days. EricEnfermero (Talk) 12:49, 4 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]

After an initial readthrough, this looks good and I think it will be a straightforward review. The article seems robustly sourced and there are no apparent copyvios.

Early life

Would it be better to mention his parents' nationality here rather than in Personal Life? No big deal, but the first para of this section is a little thin anyway.
- Yeah, that makes sense. – Muboshgu (talk) 15:35, 7 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]
We have three sentences in a row with "___________'s baseball team". I would try to phrase one of those differently.
- Well, it's two out of three sentences that have that phrasing, so yes, I've reworded that paragraph. – Muboshgu (talk) 15:35, 7 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Professional career

Martinez was the 1985 Carolina League batting leader (by a landslide). He had a pretty rapid rise from Class A to MLB, so that might help to put it in context.
- That's impressive, I did not know that. I'm adding it now. – Muboshgu (talk) 15:35, 7 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]
There are a few seasons that aren't really covered in the body. I would try to give at least some stats for each season. He had a pretty good '87 season, hitting .292. His average did fall in 1988, but I would clarify that it was only to .255. 1993 and 1994 particularly stick out to me. He did get injured and get released, but I would mention stats because he played >90 games in each of those seasons.
- I've added 1987, and will look into those others. – Muboshgu (talk) 20:36, 9 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Fifth paragraph: "but saw an increase in playing time when he was replaced by Terry Bevington" - change to "when Lamont was replaced..."
- Sentence reworded – Muboshgu (talk) 20:37, 9 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]
"In addition to signing in Florida, he was enticed by the Rays' additions" - does this mean he was attracted to playing in the state of Florida?
- Yes, as he resides there. i clarified that. – Muboshgu (talk) 20:36, 9 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]
The next sentence: "first hit" - change to "the first hit".
- Done – Muboshgu (talk) 20:37, 9 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]
"First and only time" - change to "only time"
- Done – Muboshgu (talk) 20:36, 9 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Coaching career

Change his Rays coaching responsibilities to past tense.
- Done – Muboshgu (talk) 20:36, 9 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]

We should be able to pass this once we address this feedback. Thanks for your work on this. It's always great to see a GA nom for a player who has had a long career in baseball but who isn't thought of as a perennial All-Star or a Hall of Famer. EricEnfermero (Talk) 05:15, 7 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

I nearly forgot to come back to this, but I am passing it. I am going to add a couple of season stat lines, but the article is not really missing any major aspects and the nominator did a great job of addressing the feedback.

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, no copyvios, spelling and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
No images to worry about; as he is an active coach, maybe someone will get one this season.
Overall:
Pass/Fail:
Nice work! EricEnfermero (Talk) 02:47, 23 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks! I was about to come back to finish this off, but I'm sure I can still find ways to improve it. – Muboshgu (talk) 14:16, 24 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]