Talk:Darrun Hilliard/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Hunter Kahn (talk · contribs) 18:29, 7 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]

I will be reviewing this article. — Hun ter Ka hn 18:29, 7 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 22:57, 9 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]

You've done an excellent job with this article, particularly with piecing together such a thorough review based on a wide variety of sources over several seasons/games. Most of the comments I have are minor and will be easy to address, so I'm confident this will be passed as a GA very soon. My comments are below:

The “College career: Freshman” section starts "Villanova coach Jay Wright considered redshirting Hilliard in his freshman season…” Can you add any context as to ‘’why’’ they wanted to redshirt him?
- I'm guessing because Jay Wright didn't think he was ready to compete in the Big East yet. I'm not sure I can add this since it is speculation, but it is the most likely scenario. I don't think I should do anything unless you can find a source for it. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 21:04, 10 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  - Yeah, obviously we don't wan to add speculation, so if there's no other source out there that expands on this, we'll just leave the wording as is. — Hun ter Ka hn 01:07, 15 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]
The last sentence in the first paragraph of “College career: Sophomore” ends “...and made a critical three-pointer with 5:42 left in the second half.” I’m probably just missing it, but where in the source does it say this?
- I removed it because it wasn't that important for the article anyway. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 12:51, 14 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]
The last sentence in the first paragraph of “College career: Junior” end with “...he established a new career high with 26 points on 7-of-11 shooting from the field.” The rest of this sentence comes from the article you linked, but the 7-of-11 stat comes from the Box Score section of that link. Do you think it’s necessary to include a separate citation linking to the Box Score for that portion of the sentence? (If you don’t, it’s fine; I don’t feel strongly about this one, and I may be nit-picking. :D)
- I don't think it is necessary for two refs since the box score is easily accessible from the ESPN site. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 12:56, 14 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  - That's fine. — Hun ter Ka hn 01:07, 15 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]
In the second paragraph of “College career: Junior,” there is a sentencce that ends “...with Hilliard adding 13 points and grabbed five rebounds in the 77–65 loss.” When I look at the box score, I see four rebounds for Hilliard, so should that be four instead of five? (Also, like the comment above, should this have a separate citation for the Box Score link?)
- I removed the bit about rebounds. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 12:56, 14 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]
~~This source used in “College career: Senior” is dead, but I’ve replaced it with an archived version from the Internet Archive Wayback Machine.~~
- Ok. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 12:56, 14 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]
~~Second sentence in “College career: Senior” reads "He averaged 14.3 points and 2.8 assists per game as a senior.” Am I mistaken, or does the source say it’s 2.1 assists for that season?~~
- Good catch. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 13:01, 14 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]
~~Third sentence in that same section ends “...hitting 9-of-17 shots.” Like the others above, this is from the Box Score section. Again, optional if you think this requires a separate citation.~~
- Not necessary, in my eyes. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 13:01, 14 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  - I'm fine with that. — Hun ter Ka hn 01:07, 15 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]
~~Sentences that end “...he scored 24 points and made 6-of-10 three-pointers in a 71–50 victory at home.” and “...made out of 13 attempts." Again, the Box Score thing, optional.~~
- Ditto. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 13:01, 14 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  - Yup. :) — Hun ter Ka hn 01:07, 15 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]
In “Professional career,” there is a sentence that reads "Hilliard credited the Pistons for taking him after he had a productive workout with that team.” To me ‘’credited’’ doesn’t seem like the right word. Maybe “Hilliard attributed the decision to a productive workout with the team” or something like that?
- Rewritten. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 20:03, 16 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Last but not least, it looks like the last source added to this story is from August. That makes sense, given that you had nominated this article for GA some time ago, but can you make sure there haven’t been any new sources with new information to come out since then that should be added to this story? I did a Google search for some sources and found a few possibilities ([1] [2] [3] [4] [5] [6]) and notably, it appears he broke his nose during a pick-up basketball game in September and required surgery ([7] [8] [9])

Thanks much! — Hun ter Ka hn 03:39, 10 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]

- Added a bit about him breaking his nose. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 01:42, 24 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Passing this GAN. Thanks! — Hun ter Ka hn 14:02, 3 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]