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I'd like to see an explanation of why this was chauvinist (there was no prejudiced belief of the superiority of the Croatians involved, at least none that I can see) or nationalist (as opposed to simply patriotic).

When was Jasenovac i Gradiška Stara exactly sung during the Spring? Never heard of any such thing. Former Yugoslavia was particularly harsh on fascism, there's no way that this would ever have been done by the movement leaders.

The rant in the later paragraph is just junk. What was so covert about the constitutional change and the actions of Croatian politicians between 1971 and 1980s? How does this expression of Croatian patriotism put the atrocities of NDH in "the second plan" - did any expression of Croatian patriotism somehow become inherently wrong because of NDH? How does the Spring relate to any sort of goal of getting an "ethnically pure Croatian state"? How did the Croatian secession "purge Croatia of Serbs"?

I guess some people just don't care about common sense... --Joy [shallot] 17:01, 16 May 2006 (UTC)

statistics

June 6, 2006 - I would like to see some proof behind the statistics provided on the page - i.e. that Serbia used 46% of transfer funds, and that Croatia retained only 7% of the tourism money it made. Although possibly true, I don't think the Croatian Spring movement could really be said to have been motivated by an economic philosophy - nationalism and ethnic ideology had everything to do with it. Still, I would like to see the author of those 'statistics' back it up with some data. Thank you. —Preceding unsigned comment added by 70.68.184.12 (talk • contribs) 00:28, 6 June 2006

comment by Dt6265

maybe it should be mentioned that the repudiation of croatian and serbian national symbols held, only 23 years after the second world war, a certain rationale behind it. it seems to me that there is at least an issue in that attempting to (and i understand how incredibly miserable the tightrope walk is) mediate between balkan nationalities and their claims, nonetheless we should not negate the objective reality of what the NDH for example actually was (and citing, though probably out of the scope of explaining why the communists had no interest in allowing croat or ustasa symbols [and i did say "or"] to gain any nationalistic currency, studies of the activity of cetnik organizations in eastern bosnia, and sorry don't know the rules for formulating diacritics). just to say that speaking the language(s), having lived there, but not being of any of the ethnicities represented in the former yugoslavia and having lived in four of the republics, i think (and i think that any who's being honest) will note that it's important to point out that "bratsvo i jedinstvo" wasn't just stupid communist paranoia, and the communists didn't see it as just being paranoid towards nationalism but had a visceral feeling that movements like the croatian spring or the albanian protests of 1981 and even later with the "slovene spring" were a terrible omen of something that (and you have to be bruatally honest here) did actually happen between 1991 and the present. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Dt6265 (talk • contribs) 06:05, 13 September 2006

suppression?

I think that is absurd. Their national symbols were part of the yugoslav emblem. see here *http://hem.bredband.net/vuk-sfrj/grbhrv.gif, http://hem.bredband.net/vuk-sfrj/grbsrb.gif, etc.*.. so this article, is in a sense, false. Tito's government banned nazi symbols (like germany does today). Please do not use wikipedia to post bias material. With this in mind, I am altering this article to fit its neutral stand.—The preceding unsigned comment was added by 24.151.136.19 (talk) 05:11, 4 January 2007 (UTC).


"several other notable political prisoners in Croatia from this period"

Claim of "several other notable political prisoners in Croatia from this period" links to a list of 3 (three) names, all poorly sourced, with broken links or not sourced at all.
Clearly, all "very" notable. And while "several" does technically mean "more than two but not many", either "few" or simply "three" would be far more correct. --37.203.98.175 (talk) 09:17, 29 April 2016 (UTC)

"Croat far-right terrorism"

Zoupan, this section does not establish a causal link with the topic (i.e. the rest of the article), except by a single unreferenced statement ("The crackdown on the Croatian leadership led to heightened anti-Yugoslav activity by Croat emigrant groups.").

Unless there are reliable sources that show that the 1970s Croatian far-right terrorism and the Croatian Spring are directly related, the section needs to go. 21:00, 4 January 2017 (UTC)

I have removed the section.[1] I believe the content is best suited for Far-right politics in Croatia. GregorB (talk) 21:37, 17 January 2017 (UTC)

Croatian -> Serbian

@VS6507: could you please explain this edit, namely the edit summary ("Croatian" doesn't exist)? GregorB (talk) 13:10, 26 June 2019 (UTC)

Comments on copyedit

  • Some harv errors: Grbić 2012, pp. 347–348. Harv error: this link doesn't point to any citation. Mrkalj 2019, p. 76. Harv error: this link doesn't point to any citation.
    • Fixed. Missed those completely.
  • I think the infobox may be too detailed. For example, "Distribution of Yugoslav tourism industry earnings" isn't mentioned in the lead.
    • I trimmed it down a bit, I'll see what else could be compacted.
  • The etc. in the lead is probably too informal, so I replaced it with "other expressions of Croatian culture"; let me know if that's mistaken. (t · c) buidhe 11:33, 7 May 2021 (UTC)
  • What is an "extended central committee"?
    • The central committee had two categories of members - "senior" members (not necessarily by age or duration of service but by rank) and "junior" members. When both groups were attending a session, the central committee was the "extended" central committee. The actual word was prošireni and could also be translated as widened or expanded.
  • When speaking of governments that restrict civil liberties, "oppression" and "repression" are not synonymous. The former includes the judgement of injustice, while the later is descriptive and therefore better for WP:IMPARTIAL.
    • Did not know this. Thanks for pointing out the difference. I'll watch out for the difference.
  • "He was accused of plotting to seize power disregarding the decisions of the eighth congress of the SKJ, and abuse of the State Security Administration directly or through allies" Is this something that Ranković actually did or was the accusation made up to get rid of him?
    • Hard to say. Sources seem quite reserved - probably for the same reason. He (+allies) certainly disregarded a lot of decisions of the eighth congress of the SKJ by dragging their feet, taking no action to implement reforms/decentralisation decisions or working to reverse decentralisation measures already in place. He was not formally the head of UDBA, but one of his allies/appointees was. It would not be inconcievable that a communist secret service without real judicial oversight would wiretap whoever was deemed interesting - UDBA were generally tought of as untouchable. The lack of oversight also made it impossible to refute accusations (well-founded or otherwise) of wiretapping Tito or anyone else. Ranković was deemed the successor to Tito before the affair (and was the vice-president of the Republic), but he would not be the first VP to plot takeover or to seek to improve his chances in post-Tito succession with compromising information on potential competitors. There was no formal investigation (except the political one by the commission to decide if he and his allies erred against the socialist order) and no trial.--Tomobe03 (talk) 08:24, 9 May 2021 (UTC)
  • I think the background section is longer than it needs to be. Try to see if you can cut out some details. (t · c) buidhe 05:20, 9 May 2021 (UTC)
    • I'll also have another editor take a look at the article as a part of the WP:FAM and will point the background issue out to them. I'd prefer to shorten whatever is possible (i.e. not necessary), but I'll wait for their opinion too.--Tomobe03 (talk) 08:28, 9 May 2021 (UTC)
  • "It was noted... it was complained" should be rewritten in active voice with who complained. E.g. "Critics of the government noted". Or else drop this entirely by deleting "It was noted that" and "Furthermore, it was complained that".
    • Dropped. The dominant market position of Belgrade based foreign-trade companies (and the banks supporting them) in foreign trade is not in dispute anywhere.--Tomobe03 (talk) 09:11, 10 May 2021 (UTC)
  • "a genuine perception of cultural and demographic threat to Croatia" who perceived this?
    • The source says "Croatian nationalists" and "the public". While this is somewhat vague, in light of the Batjer report, this might have been a sizeable part of the population - or at least a large part of SKH membership and general population could have been convinced of this. I tried to add some clarification, but I'm unsure if this makes it appear as a fringe view.--Tomobe03 (talk) 09:17, 10 May 2021 (UTC)
  • "orchestrated threats" orchestrated by whom?
    • The source does not say specifically beyond "Serbs". I understand from the source that there was no specific individual or group thought of as running such campaign. I see it would be far better to have this attributed, so I'll remove the word until I find an appropriate source.--Tomobe03 (talk) 09:33, 10 May 2021 (UTC)
  • "unrelated" (in Grievances section) unrelated to what?
  • Language question—are the mentioned dictionaries notable? I expect so, so they should be wikilinked per WP:REDLINK.
    • Now that you mentioned this, I had a more thorough look and found a wiki article on the dictionary. It appears to have a fairly complicated title, and I never thought to look under that. Linked now.--Tomobe03 (talk) 09:58, 10 May 2021 (UTC)
  • "An unrelated contemporary Serbo-Croatian dictionary" can we be more specific on the publication date than "contemporary"?
    • Added info. Not sure the dictionary itself is notable though. Serbian wiki has article on the author and notes the dictionary in the article, but does not have redlink or blue link for the dictionary.--Tomobe03 (talk) 09:45, 10 May 2021 (UTC)
    • RL stepping in for a couple of hours... I'll pick this up again later today.--Tomobe03 (talk) 10:01, 10 May 2021 (UTC)
  • "taking aim at" exactly what does this mean? Depending on what the source says, it could be rephrased as something like, "This step would disadvantage the many Serb bureaucrats in Croatia."
    • The source literally says "taking aim at". I expect the move would disadvantage Serb bureaucrats and your proposal should be fine in that respect.
  • "several denunciations from the SKJ" from whom?
  • Institute for the History of Workers’ Movement of Croatia Is it a notable institution? If so, redlink is appropriate.
  • "The reaction was linguistic purism"... Whose reaction?
    • The source doesn't say specifically except - among Croats. I'd add such acceptance was not universal and degree of accepted linguistic purism varied (and still varies).--Tomobe03 (talk) 12:35, 10 May 2021 (UTC)
  • Some of the points above may be impossible to fix if the sources are vague but try to be as specific as possible. (t · c) buidhe 08:45, 10 May 2021 (UTC)
  • The "SKH factions and involvement" section should be split into subsections if possible. On my mobile device this section takes more than 7 whole screens, making it unnecessarily difficult to read for those on mobile. (t · c) buidhe 09:26, 10 May 2021 (UTC)
  • "The SKH also opposed the underrepresentation of Croats..." Did they want proportionate representation of all ethnic groups or overrepresentation of Croats in these jobs?
    • All sources I consulted imply that they complained that the representation was not proportional. I assume this means they wanted proportional representation. Actually very little attention was paid to anyone except Croats and Serbs in the relevant claims and counterclaims. This is probably because (according to this [3]), Hungarians, Slovenes, Czechs, and Italians combined accounted for about 2% of Croatia's population in 1971 as the third-, fourth-, fifth- and sixth-largest ethnic groups after Croats and Serbs.--Tomobe03 (talk) 13:51, 10 May 2021 (UTC)
  • "student pro-rector" This makes it sound like a student who is also a pro-rector. Otherwise it should be rephrased to something like, "pro-rector of student life". (t · c) buidhe 13:35, 10 May 2021 (UTC)
    • Actually, he was a student then. A student was elected at the post as a student representative. Higher education legislation enacted in Yugoslavia in 1960s prescribed student participation in University bodies (including a pro-rector post) as a form of implementation of self-management at the universities.--Tomobe03 (talk) 13:40, 10 May 2021 (UTC)
  • I think you need a really brief explanation of who Tavelic is.
  • Are the SKH's claims that Yugoslavia did not develop as ZAVNOH envisioned accurate? Was it true that ZAVNOH's vision was similar to what the SKH was striving for?
    • At least in part yes. Hebrang (and thus ZAVNOH as Hebrang led the KPH which dominated the ZAVNOH) claimed that the WWII struggle meant national (i.e. Croatian) liberation as well as class struggle (i.e. communist revolution). He came into conflict with Tito during the WWII over this. Tito prevailed in this although Hebrang was only removed from Croatia, i.e. his "power base", by being assigned to the federal government minister post and ultimately eliminated politically during the Tito-Stalin split. He died in prison, but more importantly for this issue, his arrest meant that his views (which he previously touted through ZAVNOH) on the federation became entirely unacceptable for the SKJ due to their association with Hebrang.--Tomobe03 (talk) 10:58, 11 May 2021 (UTC)
      OK, I think it would be beneficial to clarify that this is an accurate view of the past. (t · c) buidhe 11:11, 12 May 2021 (UTC)
  • "SKH's attempts to reinterpret the wartime Partisan struggle." Reinterpret how? Should be more clear (or just drop this sentence if not that important).
    • As above - meaning that the Partisan struggle meant not only a communist revolution and fight against foreign occupation and collborationist regimes, but also national (meaning Croatian, Slovene, etc. and not Yugoslav) emancipation - within the Yugoslav framework.--Tomobe03 (talk) 10:58, 11 May 2021 (UTC)
  • "Croatian nationalist émigré magazine" should be named
    • Named. Not sure if it is notable though.
  • "attributed to its Moscow correspondent" was this person named? ("attributed" already introduces doubt, so I don't think "alleged" is necessary even if it's not known if this person existed
    • The sources I managed to find did not specify the correspondent's name. I'll have a look to see if I can find the information on his/her name.
  • "By November, Croatian nationalists were advocating" Which year? I assume 1971 so I'm confused by the later mention of "the SKH's January 1970 shift".
    • Yes that's November 1971. I meant to say in the second sentence that the Bosnia and Herzegovina leadership avoided reacting to political developments (especially shifting of the SKH leadership views in January 1970 and later to resemble those held by Matica hrvatska more closely) in Croatia as much as it could and then with caution not to inflame the situation when it did react . This changed in November 1971 as the events started to affect Bosnia and Herzegovina more directly through Matica hrvatska's (or its representatives') actions. I can appreciate that this bit is confusing though. Do you have any suggestions how to untangle this?--Tomobe03 (talk) 12:09, 11 May 2021 (UTC)
      I would rewrite this paragraph so it's in chronological order to alleviate confusion. (t · c) buidhe 11:13, 12 May 2021 (UTC)
      Rearranged as suggested.--Tomobe03 (talk) 14:37, 12 May 2021 (UTC)
  • "It was proposed by some" By whom?
    • The source used says "Throughout May and June, some members of the Croatian central committee likened Brezhnev’s offers to the offer made to the Czechoslovak leadership in 1968. Some argued that Tito probably invented the call in order to use the threat of a potential Soviet intervention to strengthen national unity and force the party leaders to compromise." I would say this means "unspecified members of the SKH central committee".--Tomobe03 (talk) 13:36, 11 May 2021 (UTC)
  • "ahead of the Prague Spring", I'm confused, I expected this to be "ahead of the Warsaw Pact invasion of Czechoslovakia"? Why would the Soviet leadership indicate there was some sort of crisis prior to the Prague Spring?
    • Of course. I made a mistake - corrected now.
  • "more likely" according to whom was it more likely?
    • I removed this. I just read the source once again and even though the State Department reacted to a statement made by the Yugoslav ambassador saying that Nixon supported Croatian separatists in a way which might be consistent with a denial of such claim, I misread it the first time around and understood that it was made during the Nixon administration. In fact it was only made in 1976 and dismissed the ambassador's statement as "an attack on the policy of a former president and might be construed as having implications today" (i.e. in 1976 and not actually commenting what Nixon thought of the issue).--Tomobe03 (talk) 13:48, 11 May 2021 (UTC)
  • "ensure United States political, economic, and military support" how would a state visit ensure that this support would be available or forthcoming? I think maybe this sentence is trying to say something more like, "reassure Tito of the United States' political, economic, and military support for Yugoslavia"?
    • I agree with your interpretation. Just to clarify, since the Tito-Stalin split Yugoslavia was expecting the USSR to attack it and relied on the US for military support (importing or receiving as aid large quantities of weapons and training through the Mutual Defense Assistance Act) or deterrence (Yugoslavia concluded defensive Balkan Pact (1953) with Greece and Turkey which remained in place when Greece and Turkey joined the NATO). Yugoslav-Soviet relations warmed after the death of Stalin but Soviet interventions in Hungary and Czechoslovakia convinced Tito that the Warsaw Pact might attack anyway and Tito was careful not to give an impression of becoming too close with the USSR in order not to jeopardise US support.--Tomobe03 (talk) 14:00, 11 May 2021 (UTC)
  • It's not clear to me how the third paragraph of the "Foreign policy considerations" section is related to the Croatian Spring (t · c) buidhe 08:47, 11 May 2021 (UTC)
    • The Brezhnev call added an aspect to the political power struggle in Yugoslavia between reformists in various constituent republics (SKH leadership included) and conservatives over decentralisation. Brezhnev's offer to help (i.e. intervene) made Tito's decision to throw support to one of the factions more urgent to deny the USSR excuse for an intervention. The Nixon's visit is relevant because of the toast controversy (after all it took place in the relevant period) and as a part of the response to the Brezhnev's offer. Admittedly this is not central to the issue, but I think it adds some comprehensiveness to the coverage. I'll be sure to point out this issue in the next (FAM) step, just to make sure.--Tomobe03 (talk) 14:08, 11 May 2021 (UTC)
  • "The protest was formally against federal regulations on hard currency, banking and commerce. Additional political demands were added at Paradžik's urging." If the meaning is "initially, the demands were X, but later other demands were added", then "formally" is the wrong word. "Formally" would mean that officially the protestors demanded X but in fact wanted Z as well although Z was not in their formal demands. Also, what demands were added?
    • Yes the word should be "initially". The source (Ramet) says there were additional demands were creation of a separate military district covering only Croatia where the Yugoslav People's Army units would be directly subordinated to Croatian authorities (the source used says "...to become, in effect, a Croatian army,..." and relocaton of the Yugoslav Navy HQ to Split; the demand for greater banking autonomy/authority was expanded by addition of a demand for establishment of a Croatian national bank, representation of Croatia in the UN and other demands. However, Ramet does not specify which of these were added at Paradžik's urging except that "most of the various demands ... outlined above" were adopted. I'll see if I can dig up something more specific--Tomobe03 (talk) 13:47, 12 May 2021 (UTC)
    • buidhe, I managed to find specific information and added it to the article. There's quite a few of them... Should that bit be trimmed down?--Tomobe03 (talk) 14:28, 12 May 2021 (UTC)
  • "Tito particularly criticised Matica hrvatska and said it had created a political party pursuing establishment of a state like the NDH." For clarity, I changed this to: "Tito particularly criticised Matica hrvatska, accusing it of being a political party and attempting to establish a fascist state similar the NDH." If this is inaccurate, it should be changed back.
  • "broadcast to the nation" All of Yugoslavia or just Croatia?
    • All of Yugoslavia. Reworded accordingly.
  • "Nonetheless, it failed to propose any action which would address the situation swiftly" This is pretty much an opinion-based statement: "failed", "swiftly" according to whom? What exactly would "address the situation"? I would either rewrite or remove this sentence. (t · c) buidhe 12:59, 12 May 2021 (UTC)

Light c/e and tweaks from PM

G'day Tomobe03, great job on this. As I've made quite a few edits, I won't be reviewing at GA, but once the final few tags are resolved this article will be in great shape, and should sail through GAN. Cheers, Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 08:43, 14 June 2021 (UTC)

Thank you very much for your input. I believe I have addressed all the tags now. I'd appreciate if you could have a quick look at the most recent edits too. Cheers--Tomobe03 (talk) 13:57, 14 June 2021 (UTC)
They all look good. Nice work. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 07:34, 21 June 2021 (UTC)

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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 21:15, 12 October 2021 (UTC)


I can take a look at this! Please be somewhat patient with me, as it is a long article, but I promise I'll be as thorough and quick as I can! — GhostRiver 21:15, 12 October 2021 (UTC)

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Infobox and lede

  • Commas around "or Maspok"
  • "initially not involved" → "not initially involved"

Background

Economic crisis

  • "advocated favouring" → "advocated in favour of"
  • "in 1964" → "the following year"

Politicisation of reforms

  • "the head of the League of Communists of Macedonia (SKM) Krste Crvenkovski" → "Krste Crvenkovski, the head of the League of Communists of Macedonia (SKM),"

Peak of the reformist forces

  • "decided to shelve plans"

National revival

Grievances

  • Good

Language question

  • "There were also several denunciations of the Declaration on the Name and Status of the Croatian Literary Language from the SKJ within days." → "Within days, there were also several denunciations of the declaration from the SKJ."

SKH factions

  • Comma after "and secretary Miko Tripalo"

SKH involvement until mid-1971

  • The first three paragraphs all begin with "On [date]" – not quite proseline, but still should be broken up
  • "that Dabčević-Kučar orders" → "that Dabčević-Kučar order"

Looking for role models from the past

  • "Catholic Church for Croatian culture" → "Catholic Church in Croatian culture"

Demands for autonomy and a new constitution

  • "in establishment of the" → "in establishing"
  • "Serbian nationalism flared up"
  • No comma needed after "75 percent of the coverage would be on Croatian topics"

Outside Croatia

  • "were advocating annexing" → "were advocating the annexation of"

Foreign policy considerations

  • Comma should be after "for the independence of Croatia" rather than after "or alternatively"

Suppression and purges

November plenum and student protest

  • Either colon or parentheses after "hosted by the republic's leadership", but not both

Karadordevo meeting and the purges

  • "New Croatia" should be italicized

Aftermath

Maintenance of reforms

  • In the first sentence, the election of Perišin is stated to be ten months after the constitutional amendments, but the events are stated as if he was already in that position
  • "anti-Communist" → "anti-communist"
  • Pirker's death, in a sentence of its own, feels somewhat trivial, as the aftermath of his death is limited to his number of funeral attendees
  • "leading it to lose the support of the Serbs of Croatia." → "and subsequently lost support from the Serbs of Croatia."
  • Comma after "were defeated by Grbić"

Legacy in the final decades of Yugoslavia

  • "1970s purges" → "purges of the 1970s"

References

  • Purely for aesthetic reasons, it might be nice to add refbegin/refend tags on the "Sources" to put them into columns rather than having that long single-column list of small text

General comments

  • All images are properly licensed and relevant
  • No stability concerns in the revision history
  • Earwig score looks good at 20%

That's all I've got! Putting on hold now to allow nominator to address comments. Feel free to ping me with questions. — GhostRiver 18:56, 13 October 2021 (UTC)

GhostRiver thank you very much for taking time to review this GAN. I have edited the article after your review to implement your suggestions and address issues you have raised. These include the following two which I'd like to briefly explain here too:

  • Perišin election dating is correct. There were two different sets of constitutional amendments: one in 1971 amending Yugoslav constitution, and another in 1972 amending the Constitution of the Socialist Republic of Croatia (all Yugoslav federated republics had their own separate constitution). I have added a brief clarification to this passage.
  • According to Ramet, Pirker's funeral is relevant for the article insofar that the size of the crowd following the purges (and during the period when some forms of repression against individuals associated with Croatian Spring were still ongoing) demonstrated the broad support for the ousted SKH leadership. I have added a sentence to the previously single-sentence paragraph to clarify this.

Could you please take another look at those edits. Cheers--Tomobe03 (talk) 23:18, 13 October 2021 (UTC)

Tomobe03 Thank you for making those edits. I think that there's some confusion regarding the Perišin election. My central comment being raised here is that the structure of the sentence creates a confusing chronology. You have the main event (the constitutional amendments), which happened in February, and then in the middle is the election, which happens 10 months later. If I am understanding properly, Perišin was not President of the Executive Council of SR Croatia when these amendments were passed, but the phrasing "with Ivo Perišin having been made" makes it sound as if he were in this role at the time. I hope that clarifies a little more what I was trying to get at. — GhostRiver 15:08, 14 October 2021 (UTC)
GhostRiver, oh right. That's a typo, Perišin was elected in December 1971, as his predecesor (Haramija) was removed from the position within the context of the purges discussed in the article. I've corrected that and added a source to support the date.--Tomobe03 (talk) 16:50, 14 October 2021 (UTC)
Thank you for clarifying! Passing now! — GhostRiver 16:53, 14 October 2021 (UTC)
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