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Peer review

Hi Daniel,

Great article! Here are things I thought you did very well: -Your article was fun to read and is on super cool topic -I loved that you had a little blurb about multiple cities in the U.S. It would be interesting if you focused on cities outside the U.S. as well! -The explanation of types of tours and activities was a great addition -Great use of images! I forgot to use images in my own article so thanks for the reminder :)

Here are some suggestions: -I'm not sure what Enotourism is, so maybe provide a definition? -There are a few spelling errors throughout the article and fixing them will help to polish your piece -There are some un-cited statements throughout (e.g. some stats in each section that don't have references)

I think making sure that your stats have sources is the most important change you could make. But overall an awesome and fun read!!

Hi Daniel- The structure of your article is really good, and the sources you used cover all the important information. It's a really interesting topic and I enjoyed reading about it!

One aspect I think you could improve on is using a more objective/formal voice. Phrases like "for ages", "steeped in history", "an artsy neighborhood", and "claims the crown" are effective for a different kind of writing, but they imply an opinion and aren't as formal as an encyclopedia is usually written.

You use two terms without defining them first- enotourism and neolocalism. Try to explain what these are first before describing how they relate to your topic.

There are a couple spelling mistakes, grammar errors, and unnecessary capitalizations throughout, so just make sure you proofread.

In your section on Portland, Oregon, it would be helpful to cite a source for the claim that the city is nicknamed "Beervana" and that it is considered by some to be the most impressive craft beer scene in the country.

The section on social media is really interesting and adds notability to this topic. I think it would be even more effective if you could find some data on the number of users or downloads for those apps! — Preceding unsigned comment added by TashaM09 (talk • contribs) 18:26, 17 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Feedback from New Page Review process

I left the following feedback for the creator/future reviewers while reviewing this article: Thank you for this new article, though I personally wonder if other cities beyond Denver and the two Portlands could be covered; and if there are other possibilities, the coverage of those three cities could be tightened up a bit..

---DOOMSDAYER520 (Talk|Contribs) 15:41, 6 January 2020 (UTC)[reply]