Talk:Cora Slocomb di Brazza/GA2

GA Review

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Reviewer: Simongraham (talk · contribs) 17:52, 4 March 2023 (UTC)

This looks like another excellent article by SusunW and likely to be very close to GA. It is also in line with the 2023 Women in Green Goal #1 (Women, peace, and diplomacy). I will start a review shortly. simongraham (talk) 17:52, 4 March 2023 (UTC)

Muchas gracias, simongraham. I look forward to working with you again to improve the article. SusunW (talk) 17:54, 4 March 2023 (UTC)

It is a pleasure. It looks as if you have done an excellent job so far. simongraham (talk) 06:08, 6 March 2023 (UTC)

Comments

This is a stable and well-written article. 98.2% of authorship is by SusunW. It is currently assessed as a B class article.

• The text is clear and comprehensive.
• It is written in a summary style, consistent with relevant Manuals of Style.
• The article is of reasonable length, with 2,350 words of readable prose.
• The lead is relatively long at 409 words.
• Text seems to be neutral.
• There is no evidence of edit wars.
• Earwig's Copyvio Detector states copyright violation is unlikely, with a score of 23.7%.
• All accessible sources seem live.
• Spot checks, of Cooper 1922, Cova 2022 and Pucci 2022 confirm that references are relevant.
• References appear to be from generally reputable sources. I particularly enjoyed the contemporary voices, like the articles in the New York Times from 1887 and 1907, as well as the more recent as I feel they helped contextualise her.
• The images seem appropriate and relevant.
• All images have relevant PD tags.

Review

• Suggest amending the sentence "In one such initiative, she fought for the pardon of an Italian immigrant Maria Barbella accused of murder" to either "...she fought for the pardon of an Italian immigrant, Maria Barbella, accused of murder", "...she fought for the pardon of Maria Barbella, an Italian immigrant accused of murder" or something similar.
  •  Done SusunW (talk) 14:55, 6 March 2023 (UTC)
• The sentence "For three decades after the first Brazza Lace Cooperative School opened in 1891, the main earnings of women in the region came from producing lace, or growing violets, which she encouraged her brother-in-law Filippo Savorgnan di Brazza to develop from a wild white violet to enable another outlet for women to earn money by growing and marketing the flowers." is very long. Suggest breaking it up.
  • Better? SusunW (talk) 14:55, 6 March 2023 (UTC)
    • That looks great. simongraham (talk) 07:21, 7 March 2023 (UTC)
• The article on Maria Barbella states that she was the second woman to be sentenced to die in the electric chair, the first being Lizzie Halliday.
  • added "one of" SusunW (talk) 14:55, 6 March 2023 (UTC)
• I believe that it should be "whom" not "who" in "Barbella had been raped by her boyfriend Domenico Cataldo, who she murdered after he refused to restore her honor by marrying her."
  • Thanks for that.  Done SusunW (talk) 14:55, 6 March 2023 (UTC)
• Suggest only page 8 is relevant to citation 43 as it is the second paragraph that discusses the committee.
  •  Done SusunW (talk) 14:55, 6 March 2023 (UTC)

@SusunW: Excellent work on this article. Please see my comments above and ping me when you would like me to look again. simongraham (talk) 06:12, 6 March 2023 (UTC)

simongraham Thank you so much for your insightful review. I truly appreciate your help in improving the article. I think I have made the changes you requested and I tried to trim the lede. She was a fascinating find. If I have time, I'm going to try to do her mother this month. Ping me if I need to look at it again. SusunW (talk) 14:55, 6 March 2023 (UTC)

SusunW That looks excellent. I feel this is ready to go and will start my assessment now. simongraham (talk) 07:21, 7 March 2023 (UTC)

Assessment

The six good article criteria:

1. It is reasonable well written.

   the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct;

   it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead, layout and word choice.

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   it contains a reference section, presented in accordance with the layout style guideline;

   all inline citations are from reliable sources;

   it contains no original research;

   it contains no copyright violations nor plagiarism;

   it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail.

3. It is broad in its coverage

   it addresses the main aspects of the topic.

   it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).

4. It has a neutral point of view.

   it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to different points of view.

5. It is stable.

   it does not change significantly from day to day because of any ongoing edit war or content dispute.

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   images are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content;

   images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.

Pass. Excellent work, SusunW and team. I believe that this article meets the criteria to be a Good Article. I look forward to seeing your article on Abby Day Slocomb should you chose to follow that idea up. simongraham (talk) 07:25, 7 March 2023 (UTC)

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