Talk:Collinsville Cemetery, Queensland

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Criticism

The page is rather textually dominated by the account of the 1954 Collinsville mining disaster and its aftermatch, which is already adequately covered in a Wikipedia article dedicated to the disaster. I suggest it be condensed, keeping detail that links it to the cemetery (such as the funeral ceremony, dedicated memorials, and commemorative activities held at the cemetery if any).Cloptonson (talk) 21:58, 12 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I have made the paragraphs a subsection, with a link to the Main Article on Collinsville mine disaster, as a framework for editing. I have made minor edits but prefer to leave it to Australian users (of which I am not one - I am English) to decide if this subsection should have major cuts, preferably after comparing the detail with that in the Main Article. The pictures of the funeral could stay as they are, as they relate to the cemetery.Cloptonson (talk) 06:42, 14 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]