Talk:Chunky (Bruno Mars song)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 07:27, 14 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

The song was released → It was released
Link "radio" to Contemporary hit radio
and served as the fourth single from 24K Magic → and served as the album's fourth single
"Chunky" was co-written by Mars, Philip Lawrence → "Chunky" was co-written by Mars alongside Philip Lawrence

It's the same there are four writers, so separated by commas seems better. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 13:34, 17 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]

under their label → I would rather say "alias"
is a funk and electro-funk → we don't need "funk" anymore once we got "electro-funk"

Electro funk and funk are different things. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 13:34, 17 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]

while lyrically it is an anthem to big buttocks → while lyrically acts as an anthem for big buttocks
Critics noted the resemblance → They noted the resemblance
Link rhythm and blues
Link 1980s and 1990s to 1980s in music and 1990s in music, respectively

Seems trivial. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 13:34, 17 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]

in 2016 and was certified gold → in 2016, as well as was certified gold

The rest was addressed. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 13:34, 17 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox

We don't need the "(Australia only)" bit
See my thoughts of the release date in "Other things"
Remove the "Formats" parametre alltogether; we're talking about the single now (not the song), and it wasn't released for download or streaming on its own
Remove "funk" as we've got "electro-funk"
Link the album's liner notes to the "Length" parametre
See my thoughts of the label in "Other things"

Production and release

"Chunky" was co-written by Bruno Mars, Philip Lawrence → "Chunky" was co-written by Bruno Mars alongside Philip Lawrence
were in charge of programming the drums. Mars, Lawrence → were in charge of programming the drums, while Mars, Lawrence (to avoid clipped sentences)
serving as mixing engineer → serving as a mixing engineer

Done, but the first one explained above the reason.

Composition

We don't need "funk" anymore since we have "electro-funk"; it's kind of double trouble here

Same as previous, please let me know. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 17:21, 20 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]

"Chunky" is a funk and electro-funk ballad[4][5] featuring synthesizers and drum machines.[6] The single is a mid-tempo track with a "silky pre-chorus" and a basic structure revolving around synthesizers and a "popping" bass → A mid-tempo electro-funk ballad[4][5] with a "silky pre-chorus", "Chunky" features a basic structure revolving around synthesizers, drum machines and "popping" bass.[6][7][8][9]

I shouldn't have this many sources in a row...more than three is not advised. Honestly, doesn't change much. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 17:21, 20 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]

was composed in common time and in the key of E-flat major with a tempo of 100 beats per minute → was composed in the key of E-flat major with a tempo of 100 beats per minute in common time.
Link rhythm and blues
Link 1980s and 1990s to 1980s in music and 1990s in music, respectively

As previously stated. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 17:21, 20 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Andy Kellman writing for AllMusic → Andy Kellman, writing for AllMusic,
said that the song recalls → said that the song recalled
and even "Treasure" by Mars → and Mars' own "Treasure" (2013)
and it is reminiscent of → , and further reminiscence of
the decade where neo soul began to replace new jack swing → , ... according to [WRITER] from [PUBLISHER]
an anthem to big buttocks → an anthem regarding big buttocks
Mars croons on the track → Lyrics include:

Done Everything but wha I pointed out was adressed.

Critical reception

There we have a few of connection issues, so I decided to edit the section by myself

Commercial performance

Upon the release of the 24K Magic album → Upon the release of its parent album 24K Magic
peaking at 94 and 79 → peaking at numbers 94 and 79
the song hit 108 → the song hit number 108
which acts as an extension of the → which acts as an extension to the
It debuted and peaked → It further debuted and peaked (for flow)
The song was released to radio in Australia on the week of November 27, 2017. "Chunky" → After its radio release in Australia in November 2017, "Chunky"

Done

Live performances

on October 15, 2016, on → second comma not needed
According to Billboard staff → According to the Billboard staff
of his third worldwide tour—24K Magic World Tour → of his third worldwide 24K Magic World Tour

Done

Credits and personnel

Edited by myself

Charts

Flawless :)

Certifications

Edited by myself

Release history

Unlink here since already mentioned before

Done

Other things

26.5% is a good percentage for copyviolation
No disambiguation links
No dead links
The radio airplay release in Australia isn't entirely supported by the sources given, since the release date isn't clearly specifiec and the label isn't mentioned at all. Unless you find a better source, remove the label from the entire article (use "N/A" in "Release history") and rewrite the release date to just "November 2017"

The date is not, however, it says WMA on the first source, so I won't remove it. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 15:01, 17 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]

In the meantime, I found this source 1. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 12:43, 18 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Outcome

On hold Some things to be fixed before GA. Cartoon network freak (talk) 08:38, 17 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]
- @MarioSoulTruthFan: I think everything has been sovled now, thus I'm passing. Is there any chance you could also review one of my GANs? Just disregard if you're too busy. Greets and congrats; Cartoon network freak (talk) 07:18, 21 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]

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