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Reviewer: CallMeNathan • Talk2Me 06:51, 15 April 2011 (UTC)
Lead
[edit]- singer-songwriter -> link
- Done.
- The first 3-4 sentences read a little stop and go and choppy. Try and merge them a bit so they flow better
- Done.
- It received mixed reviews -> from music critics
- Done.
- achieved positive commercial outcomes - re-write. Also, the song didn't exactly perform well
- Done.
- Swift performing with a band -> anything else?
- Done.
Background
[edit]- Pretty nice. Not going to attack you on this one :D
Composition
[edit]- Swift's vocals, Swift's vocals
- Done.
Reception
[edit]- generally positive to mixed -> we have 1 negative review and 1 mixed. Its safe to say mixed period
- Done.
- peak at number ten -> peak position of number 10
- Changed to "peak position of", but I really don't want to use numbers. "Tim McGraw", "Our Song", "Love Story", "White Horse", and multiple others do not use numbers and I think it'd be best to keep cohesive. -- ipodnano05 * leave@message 15:48, 24 April 2011 (UTC)
- making Swift's -> it
- Done.
Music video
[edit]- That long sentence is a bit run-on. Try cutting it down or separating it
- Done.
- As the video progresses, Swift is seeing singing and dancing -> try and incorporating this into another sentence
- I don't think it can be incorporated into another sentence. -- ipodnano05 * leave@message 15:52, 24 April 2011 (UTC)
Live performances
[edit]- Swift has performed the track on the AOL Sessions, -> none of these small sentences. Also, it needs a period
- Done.
- Since, Swift
- Done.
- sang suspended from the crowd on an elevator -> re-write
- Done.
- She then came down, where she was joined by a teenage choir. Swift finished the performance by surfing the crowd -> again, connect
- Done.
- She noted, "It's been a tough year." And -> comma, not period
- Done.
- Let me know when its all fixed. Again, sorry for the delay. Nice job :)--CallMeNathan • Talk2Me 09:15, 24 April 2011 (UTC)
- Your fixes have been sufficient. Good job. Now GA.--CallMeNathan • Talk2Me 04:45, 25 April 2011 (UTC)