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Reviewer: CallMeNathanTalk2Me 06:51, 15 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

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  • singer-songwriter -> link
    • Done.
  • The first 3-4 sentences read a little stop and go and choppy. Try and merge them a bit so they flow better
    • Done.
  • It received mixed reviews -> from music critics
    • Done.
  • achieved positive commercial outcomes - re-write. Also, the song didn't exactly perform well
    • Done.
  • Swift performing with a band -> anything else?
    • Done.

Background

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  • Pretty nice. Not going to attack you on this one :D

Composition

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  • Swift's vocals, Swift's vocals
    • Done.

Reception

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Music video

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  • That long sentence is a bit run-on. Try cutting it down or separating it
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  • As the video progresses, Swift is seeing singing and dancing -> try and incorporating this into another sentence

Live performances

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  • Swift has performed the track on the AOL Sessions, -> none of these small sentences. Also, it needs a period
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  • Since, Swift
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  • sang suspended from the crowd on an elevator -> re-write
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  • She then came down, where she was joined by a teenage choir. Swift finished the performance by surfing the crowd -> again, connect
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  • She noted, "It's been a tough year." And -> comma, not period