Talk:Cardiff City F.C. Under-23s and Academy/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 09:11, 2 April 2020 (UTC)

Am going to review this article as part of the GAN Backlog Drive of April to May 2020 MWright96 (talk) 09:11, 2 April 2020 (UTC)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Lead

• "The Cardiff City Under-23 side is the highest age group of football other than the senior first team at the club, although clubs" - the text in bold can be changed to either teams, squads or sides to avoid close repetition of the word "team" in the same sentence
• "including John Kerr who died suddenly while still holding the position." - while employed in the position.
• "the club announced plans to upgrade the academy to category one status, the highest possible rating available, and appointed Steve Morison as the club's under-23 manager." - repetition of the word "club"

Background

• "In the post war era," - post war should be hyphened
• "The most prominent of these, such as Nathan Blake, Damon Searle and Jason Perry, were dubbed "the darling buds of Eddie May" - who dubbed those players as "the darling buds of Eddie May"?
• "later stated that during this period the youth system" - a comma is missing between the words "period" and "the"
• "was viewed as an "unattractive prospect" - this need to be expanded to say who viewed this as an "unattractive prospect" where possible

Early progress

• "ranging from 7 to 18-years olds" - typo; it should be spelt as year
• "Chairman Sam Hammam projected an annual cost of £1 million to run the academy." - you don't need to mention Hammam's full name and occupation as it is mentioned earlier in the paragraph
• "During the 2016–17 season," - shouldn't that be 2006–07 season?
• "Robinson was credited as being a key figure in Ramsey's decision" - credited by whom?
• "to reject interest from other clubs but left the club suddenly in 2007 with the club refusing to elaborate on the decision." - too many uses of the word "club" in the same sentence
• "It is also used by the wider local community in Cardiff." - used as what? a sports facility or community meeting space or something else?

Further development

• "a new age group side was launched as the Cardiff City under-21 side" - repetition of the word "side"

Restructuring

• "Bellamy stood down after an accusation of bullying from the parents of a former academy player which Bellamy denied." - , which he denied.

References

• References 17, 18 and 72 are dead and will need to be archived
• Reference 41 is missing the publisher of the source

Will put on hold to allow the nominator to address/respond to the queries raised above. MWright96 (talk) 10:58, 2 April 2020 (UTC)

@MWright96: Thanks for taking up the review. I've addressed all of the points above, let me know what you think. Kosack (talk) 19:08, 2 April 2020 (UTC)

@Kosack: Am satisfied with the changes and will promote to GA class. MWright96 (talk) 19:29, 2 April 2020 (UTC)