Talk:CFVO-TV/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Eddie891 (talk · contribs) 22:06, 24 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]

I will take this on shortly... Eddie891 ^Talk _Work 22:06, 24 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

"While the English-language outlets in western Canada would be the second private commercial outlet in those areas, the Ottawa station would be the first French-language commercial facility in the National Capital Region." maybe try something like "there was one existing[...] there were no" rather than 'would be the (first or second)', I think that would be clearer
"a cooperative media outlet, settling on television." what does 'cooperative' mean here?
"The new organization," is the org CTVO or something else? When did it seek to "raise $1 million" -- before or after July?
"all but one of its members " would 'employees' fit better here?
" however, there" does 'however' really fit here? I'd suggest removing it
"output would be locally produced" would 'content' be a better stand-in for 'output'?
"strong impression" a good or bad one?
" dozen area organizations" would 'local organisations' fit better?
"... and 60 written submissions backed the CTVO bid" do we know about the other bids?
"that the funds raised would " had they raised all the money they sought to?
"president Raymond" suggest "their president..."
link tower of Babel
"would broadcast the first UHF" when?
"However, signs of financial troubles began to arise" maybe "soon began to arise"?
I think overall, you could add some more links
" and not living up to its promise" maybe reiterate the promise here
"The new year brought" maybe clarify what year
"claiming he was "tired"" tired of what?
"The 1976 renewal cycle" what does 'renewal cycle' refer to here?
"that it would loan $700,000" loan who the money?

That's my initial comments. OVerall, very nice work. Minor stuff, none of it is huge, I won't hinge my final call upon any individual point. happy to discuss further. Best, Eddie891 ^Talk _Work 00:57, 27 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Made a number of changes, though not all, Eddie891, but I want to address some things specifically:

It's a legit cooperative. That's really significant as it's what led to a lot of interest in this station pre-launch, what won them the licence (as this form of organization is a novelty in television broadcasting) and arguably what failed it in the long run. See, for instance, History of the cooperative movement.
I prefer area over local because of the large region (two provinces) served by this station.
Yes we do have info on the rival bids: there's a section talking about the other bids (look for the mention of Corporation Civitas).
The "tired" is a quote; he literally said "I am tired".

Raymie (t • c) 01:43, 27 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Raymie I've had a look at a number of sources, everything lines up except for the one thing I changed. Otherwise, this meets the GA criteria-- passing. Eddie891 ^Talk _Work 13:43, 29 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]