Talk:Bristol Customshouse and Post Office/GA1

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Reviewer: Wizardman (talk · contribs) 15:11, 9 August 2014 (UTC)[reply]

This one looks interesting, I'll pick it up next. Comments ideally later today. Wizardman 15:11, 9 August 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Here are the issues I found:

The first paragraph of the lead feels a but hard to read due to overuse of the word and (i'm seeing about twice per sentence). Try and trim that down.
"It was completed in 1858, from the design by Ammi B. Young, the Bristol Customshouse and Post Office is a two-story rectangular Italian palazzo style brick building that rests upon a raised granite base" I feel like it's missing a word or a sentence break somewhere. Also remove the first comma.
"The front facade is made of deep red brick that is has three large" rm is.
"which shows pedimented dormer in the" dormers; linking might help for that phrase as well.

I'll put the article on hold and will pass when fixed. Wizardman 00:08, 12 August 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I can hold it for a bit longer, but since it's a quick fix I'd rather not keep it indefinitely. Wizardman 23:12, 18 August 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Since the writer's on wikibreak, I just went and fixed the issues myself; article passes. Wizardman 22:37, 28 August 2014 (UTC)[reply]