Talk:Bishop's Palace, Wells/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Rosiestep (talk · contribs) 14:05, 31 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I'll review this one within the week. --Rosiestep (talk) 14:05, 31 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

General comments

Some of this review includes suggested improvements, not required under WP:WIAGA.
Avoid one-sentence paragraphs - I notice at least 2 of these. Can we incorporate the information into another paragraph?

I've combined some of these.— Rod ^talk 20:30, 2 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Images - Seems like too many for an article of this size -- they feel scrunched together in places-- but perhaps re-configuring some as double-images would eliminate the issue

I'm working on a small screen at present and will return to look at the images tomorrow.— Rod ^talk 20:30, 2 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Throughout the article, there are sentences with introductory elements lacking a subsequent comma. Examples include: "When the walls were built streams were diverted..." (lead), "In the 14th century Bishop Ralph of Shrewsbury..." (History), "Every August bank holiday the moat is used for the..." (Gardens), etc.

I have attempted to tackle the examples given, but I have been accused of over use of commas so often avoid them. If there are other places where they should be included, please just point them out.— Rod ^talk 20:30, 2 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Done; I've made the changes (no worries). --Rosiestep (talk) 22:37, 2 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks.— Rod ^talk 09:30, 3 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

Citations are discouraged in the lead section per WP:WHYCITE.

I have added a sentence with this in the main body and put the up to date reference there.— Rod ^talk 20:30, 2 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

History

Two-sentence paragraphs are just fine, occasionally, but 3 of them in one section makes for choppy reading.

I've done some - is more needed?— Rod ^talk 20:30, 2 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

"The building was begun" - how about "Construction began" as 'begun' is repeated in the next sentence

Done.— Rod ^talk 20:30, 2 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

"... as well as the choristers' school, a grammar school, a hospital for travellers and a chapel." - were these built on the grounds of the Bishop's Palace or nearby?

They were nearby within the liberty if the cathedral which also includes the palace.— Rod ^talk 20:30, 2 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

"The windows had stone tracery. Stone bosses where the supporting ribs meet on the ceiling are covered with representations of oak leaves and the Green Man. The building is seen as a fine example of the Early English architectural style." - perhaps better placed in the Architecture section?

The great hall has largely been demolished, whereas the architecture section deals with the buildings which can still be seen.— Rod ^talk 20:30, 2 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Use a comma to set off parenthetical elements - "poet laureate of the United Kingdom Andrew Motion was commissioned..."

I've tried but I've already commented about my comma issues.— Rod ^talk 20:30, 2 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Done --Rosiestep (talk) 22:37, 2 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Why the comma here ("Bishop Ralph of Shrewsbury, continued the building") and why here ("Bishop Kidder, was killed")?

Removed.— Rod ^talk 20:30, 2 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

"an arson attach" - attack?

Yep changed.— Rod ^talk 20:30, 2 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

"These took place after the House of Lords rejected the second Reform Bill, which aimed to get rid of some of the rotten boroughs and give Britain's fast growing industrial towns such as Bristol, Manchester, Birmingham, Bradford and Leeds greater representation in the House of Commons, however there was no rioting in Wells." - clunky sentence

I've had a go at rewording this.— Rod ^talk 20:30, 2 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

"The water which filled the moat flowed from the springs in the grounds which had previously flowed as a small stream separating the cathedral and the palace and causing marshy ground around the site. " - flowed/flowed needs rewording

Reworded.— Rod ^talk 20:30, 2 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

wls - BBC West; Inside Out (BBC TV series)

Done— Rod ^talk 20:30, 2 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Current use

"It is licenced for weddings and used for conferences and meetings" - Unclear what 'It' refers to: the palace, the restaurant, or the medieval undercroft?

It's the palace (which includes the undercroft) not the restaurant.— Rod ^talk 20:30, 2 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

"it was announced" - can you clarify the announcement, i.e. by the palace, the church leadership, in the newspapers?

It was announced by the Diocese - added.— Rod ^talk 20:30, 2 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Architecture

The large, centered image at the start of this section impedes reading continuity within the article. I think it's good to keep it but maybe move it.

This is the only image which shows the layout of the buildings, however I will return to looking at the images on a larger screen.— Rod ^talk 20:30, 2 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I've removed one image and tried use the multiple image template (which I've not used before). I've not moved the large historical sketch as making it smaller would obscure the detail & putting it right aligned at the current size seems wrong.— Rod ^talk 09:30, 3 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Bishop's Eye

Bishop Thomas Beckington - Bishop Beckington is sufficient

Done— Rod ^talk 20:30, 2 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Gardens

The header is a bit misleading as the section is about the grounds, which include gardens, buildings, etc.

Changed to grounds.— Rod ^talk 20:30, 2 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

"The water emerging from the spring is emerging " - emerging/emerging needs re-wording

Reworded.— Rod ^talk 20:30, 2 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Bishop Thomas Beckington - Bishop Beckington is sufficient

Done— Rod ^talk 20:30, 2 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

" to the springs to act as a mirror on a still day to" - to/to/to needs re-wording

Reworded.— Rod ^talk 20:30, 2 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

wl - Silver Jubilee of Elizabeth II

Done.— Rod ^talk 20:30, 2 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

"South Lawn" vs. "south lawn" - defer to the way it's spelled in the main reference

I don't understand this one. It is lower case in the article and in the Guardian ref used.— Rod ^talk 20:30, 2 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Here it is capitalized: "...existing landscaping on the South Lawn...". Here it isn't: "..."tree of heaven" on the south lawn...". I think it should be lc in both instances.--Rosiestep (talk) 22:37, 2 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks got it now.— Rod ^talk 09:30, 3 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

In the media

Maybe add the sentence to the 'Current use' section?

Done— Rod ^talk 20:30, 2 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

References

Citing multiple pages of the same source - To avoid reference clutter, you might consider using condensed sourcing for refs such as "Rambridge, Kate (2013). The Bishop's Palace. A guide to the palace and gardens. The Palace Trust".

I will look again at all the references tomorrow.— Rod ^talk 20:30, 2 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I've used sfn & added a bibliography section.— Rod ^talk 09:30, 3 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Worldwdie - typo

Done— Rod ^talk 20:30, 2 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

External links

Palace and Gardens Web Site - change to "Official website"

Done— Rod ^talk 20:30, 2 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Postcard images of Swans ringing the bell - 'Swans' should be lc

Done.— Rod ^talk 20:30, 2 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I'll put this on hold for the usual 7 days. --Rosiestep (talk) 03:47, 1 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for all comments which I will address in a day or two. I am currently on a Wikimedia UK "Train the trainers" workshop for the weekend.— Rod ^talk 20:44, 1 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I've tackled some of these but will get to the others tomorrow.— Rod ^talk 20:30, 2 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for all comments. I've now had a go at the outstanding ones.— Rod ^talk 09:30, 3 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

Is it reasonably well written?
A. Prose quality:

B. MoS compliance:
Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
A. References to sources:

B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:

C. No original research:
Is it broad in its coverage?
A. Major aspects:

B. Focused:
Is it neutral?
Fair representation without bias:
Is it stable?
No edit wars, etc:
Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:

B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
Overall:
Pass or Fail:

Good job; looks adequate for GA. --Rosiestep (talk) 14:25, 3 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]