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The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.

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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 16:10, 9 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Criteria

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1. Prose  On hold

2. Verifiability  On hold

3. Depth of Coverage ✓ Pass

4. Neutral ✓ Pass

5. Stable ✓ Pass

6. Illustrations ✓ Pass

7. Miscellaneous ✓ Pass

Comments

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  • " Southern California from the Pacific northwest and Canada." - capitalize Northwest and link Pacific Northwest. It's a specific region
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:07, 9 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "t was a transportation method to transport industrial quantities" - It's a touch repetitive to write "transportation method to transport", how does The rafts were used to transport industrial quantities ... sound?
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:12, 9 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "John A. Fastaben was the key raft-building specialist that Benson hired as a construction supervisor" - First mention of Benson in the lead, probably best to give his full name at first mention
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:17, 9 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • Be consistent with Southern California vs. southern California, I can see an argument for either capitalization
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:23, 9 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • " open ocean on the west Coast of the United States" - Either west coast or West Coast
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:23, 9 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • " Columbia river inland from the Pacific coast" - Capitalize River
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:27, 9 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "traveling only thirty miles south into" - Use the {{Convert}} template to get kms, too
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:38, 9 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "assembled consisted of fir logs" - Link fir
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:38, 9 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • " in the Pacific ocean" --> " in the Pacific Ocean"
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:38, 9 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "anywhere from 4 to 6 weeks to assemble" - MOS:NUMERALS
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:41, 9 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

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  • "The assembly involved 175 to 250 tons of chain" - Source states 125 tons.
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:41, 9 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk)
  • Ref 28 should be capitalilzed "Journal of Forest History", not "Journal of forest history"
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk)

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A little work that needs done, but very good work on improving this article since the first review. Hog Farm (talk) 17:48, 9 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@Hog Farm: All issues have been addressed. Can you take another look. Thanks. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:49, 9 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
@Doug Coldwell: - Passing the article. Heads up - you'll probably get a message on your talk page stating that it failed, though. There's a bug with the bot that runs the GAN stuff that causes it to read a pass when the article failed a previous review as a fail. Hog Farm (talk) 20:14, 9 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
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