Talk:Bembo/GA1

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Reviewer: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 18:30, 30 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Happy to take on this as well. Sainsf <^>_{Feel at home} 18:30, 30 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Sainsf: - OK sounds great, thanks! Ready when you are. Blythwood (talk) 23:51, 1 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

Please expand the lead so that it covers all the important aspects of the article. Form two or three good paras.
Citations are generally not added to the lead unless you mention something controversial. All claims should be mentioned as well as cited in the main article.

I think this is finished now. As part of tuning up the article, I've tonight written articles on two of the people mentioned, Tagliente and Fairbank to give the reader more information also.

History

Section looks choppy. Combine paras.

Not sure what you mean here, but I hope I've finished re-editing it enough for it to be more organised.

(of Bologna) was an engraver Comma before "was".
1496, (1495 by the Venetian calendar) "1496 (1495 by the Venetian calendar),"
Link Cardinal.
Say "punch-cutter" or "punchcutter"
Who is Beatrice Warde?
Link roman and Venice
Duplink: punchcutter

Section fixed and expanded. Duplinks removed

Monotype history

Aldus Manutius's 15th-century roman type No need to say "Aldus".
Introduce Arrighi in the earlier section.
Duplinks: metal type, Didone, Ludovico Vicentino degli Arrighi

Fixed

Characteristics

Is ref. 42 the source for This meant that many of the serifs ... The ascenders reach above the cap height? Place it at the end of the line.
Bembo does not attempt to faithfully copy "faithfully" sounds weird, how about "strictly"?
two versions of uppercase R R should be in italics, as are others.

Added extra citations here for the first point and a few more links. I think on balance italics break up the text flow - replaced all with quotation marks.

Related fonts

Poliphilus (1923) and italic Blado No date for the latter?
In the hot metal type era Monotype also issued a titling version of Centaur, which was often used by Penguin but has not been digitised. Source?
different letter shapes.^[63][64]) Keep citations outside bracket.
Duplinks: Hypnerotomachia Poliphili, Mosley, Arighi, hot metal type

Fixed. With the "not digitised" statement I can't prove a negative (they *might* have done one, but if so they haven't told anyone about it) so have removed this statement.

Timeline

Sure that each point is sourced here or elsewhere?

Good point - some of the dates of death might not have been. I've added some extra citations here for these.

Reception: This isn't something you had any recommendations about, but I thought I should mention that I've decided to split this section into two paragraphs. I've also reordered to make it in loose chronological order.

Digitisations and derivatives

Monotype have released "has", if Monotype is considered singular
The larger size versions of Bembo, with a more delicate and elegant design, have never been digitised. Source?
Duplinks: type colour, Robert Slimbach

Ditto, no way to prove a negative. I've cited the description of the digitisation to show that both are based on the small-size versions. Many more citations also added

Images

File:02 Garalda.svg (Diagram of Bembo showing key characteristics) is repeated in the article.
Pietro Bembo's portrait should be placed where he is mentioned first

Fixed

That should be it. These done, I would be happy to promote this. Cheers! Sainsf (talk · contribs) 13:38, 2 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Sainsf: - Thanks! Will think about all this over the next day or so. Blythwood (talk) 13:49, 2 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Most of this is now fixed - will describe in detail. I am drafting a new lead. Blythwood (talk) 21:20, 5 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  - @Blythwood: You there? Sainsf (talk · contribs) 08:08, 8 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]
    - Hi! Yes, I've been thinking about a new lead. Should have it up this evening. Blythwood (talk) 12:03, 10 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]
      - @Blythwood: Sorry but it appears you are delaying things here. Please respond within two days or I will have to fail this, it has been a week since we had any appreciable activity here. Sainsf (talk · contribs) 06:41, 13 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Sorry for the delay - I hope that fixes everything now. I've written a new intro and added some extra citations. Changes summarised above. Blythwood (talk) 03:24, 14 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Looks great. Promoted. Sainsf (talk · contribs) 03:08, 15 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]