Talk:Anthidium maculosum
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[edit]This article is or was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Mohp7. Peer reviewers: Courtney.cleveland, Cmbakwe, Mmc7777, Danakes6.
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Peer Review
[edit]Great work with the article. Overall it was well-written. I made the Description and identification section clearer by indicating that “This smaller size” is indicative of them being subordinate. I also added a comma. I also made the last sentence of the colony cycle clearer so that the reader could see the progression of stages. I made the second sentence of foraging behavior clearer. Additionally, I combined the third from last and second from last sentences and made the last sentence clearer. I added “around” between “hover” and “his territory” under the mating behavior section. I changed “research” to “rich” under the Evolution of multiple matings in females section. But overall great job! Raymundo.marcelo (talk) 18:53, 4 December 2015 (UTC)
Peer Review
[edit]This is a fantastic article; your discussion of the evolution of multiple mating in females in particular is very thorough. If possible, I would suggest expanding the Colony cycle, diet, and interspecies interaction sections. Furthermore, a section about communication between bees and the recognition mechanisms available to the bee would be useful. I went through the article and added several links to elucidate the content and integrate the article into Wikipedia. In addition, I corrected a few typos and grammatical mistakes in order to make the article flow a little bit better. I also corrected the italicization of some of the terms referring to families, orders, and tribes. As a rule, the only taxonomic terms that should be italicized are genus and species names. Finally, I also fixed the headings of each section to conform with the Wikipedia Manual of Style, which states that only the first word of a section heading should be capitalized. I hope my edits helped! Kulshrestha51 (talk) 00:36, 22 October 2015 (UTC)
Additional Comments
[edit]I thoroughly enjoyed reading this article, and learned a great deal about the A. maculosum. There were a few changes that I would make, though. The first sentence in the article has two citations listed for the following sentence: “Anthidium maculosum is a species of bee in the family Megachilidae, the leaf-cutter, carder, or mason bees.[1][2].” It would be very helpful if the facts were listed with their respective citations so that the reader would be able to easily tell where each piece of information came from. Furthermore, the third sentence under the section “Resources” originally read: “Normally a single highly territorial male will defend his own patch, but if the patch is bigger, a couple male bees that defend a certain section of the plant subdivide it.” I proceeded to correct the second half of the sentence, which due to typos, was lacking logic. I inserted the conjunction “and” and “will” so that the sentence then read: “Normally a single highly territorial male will defend his own patch, but if the patch is bigger, a couple male bees will defend a certain section of the plant and subdivide it”. In this way, the sentence is grammatically correct and logically sound. I also linked the word “diurnal” to its respective Wikipedia page (under section “colony cycle”). In addition, the folloing sentence under “Evolution of multiple Matings in Females” would benefit from an added comma: “ Also because males are larger than females, they are more successful in harassing females into mating with them as can been seen by the method of copulation.” When commas are used to offset non-essential phrase, there must be two (one on either side of the phrase). Thus, placing a comma after the world “also” would offset the introduction, and distinguish between the non-essential phrase and the rest of the sentence. Lastly, I would recommend adding more citations to the section “Evolution of Multiple Mating in Females.” A map in the taxobox would also be a good addition so that readers can visually where this species is located on a world map.Mmc7777 (talk) 16:24, 22 October 2015 (UTC)
Peer Review 2
[edit]This article had some great information in it and each section had a good amount of information. A lot of the grammatical errors I had to fix were comma related; a couple areas needed commas to add clarity and a few commas were unnecessary. I reworked the sentence about defending territories in the territorial behavior section to make it clearer and use more precise language. I also fixed a sentence about the costs of monogamy vs polyandry because the sentence was ambiguous and I wanted to make it clear that polyandry was less costly according to the rest of the information in that section. Overall great work! Danakes6 (talk) 03:31, 23 October 2015 (UTC)
Peer Review 3
[edit]This article is off to a great start with respect to the diversity of behaviors addressed, and it was very concise. To improve the article, I moved the "Foraging behavior" section under "Diet" since they both relate to what the bee eats and how it finds its food. Further, I moved "Resource defense" under the broader category of "Territorial behavior" since they both discuss how territory impacts male behavior. I switched the chronological order of the article by including the "Diet" section prior to "Territorial behavior" since "Territorial behavior" goes into more depth on how foraging impacts male-male and male-female interactions. This organization seems to flow better in terms of the topics discussed in the article. In addition to including a hyperlink to "forage" when it is first mentioned under "Foraging behavior", I also included and made some grammatical edits, including the addition of commas, and capitalized "Hymenopteran" under "Taxonomy and phylogeny." It would be great if more information could be included perhaps on the species's importance to humans in terms of agriculture or predatory relationships. Perhaps you could expand on the interaction that Anthidium maculosum has with Xylocopa californica arizonensis to provide readers with richer detail on the bee's interaction with other species. I hope you continue to expand on this article in the future! Cmbakwe (talk) 03:53, 23 October 2015 (UTC)
Peer Review
[edit]This article was well written and had a lot of thorough information. However, I would suggest trying to add more information to Interspecies Interaction. Maybe explaining what a carder bee is? I also fixed some grammar mistakes and sentence structure. I would also suggest adding a range map to show where the bee’s habitat is. Vsalazar258 (talk) 23:00, 4 December 2015 (UTC)