Talk:Angus Lewis Macdonald/GA

GA review (see here for criteria)

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Main concern is getting quotations properly cited. And a lack of any legacy/aftermath section after his death

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

   A bit about the aftermath of his death, if only a very short paragraph, is probably needed

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

   I won't hold it back on this, but there is one image you should get a second opinion on before FAC

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Comments

• If you take this to FAC, the inline link in the second paragraph of Early life will need to be removed.
• Likewise, if you're going to FA, you will want to have User:Brighterorange run his dash script over the article. Drop a note on his talk page asking him to do it.
• Usual form is to refer to the subject by the last name except at the first mention. Probably should change all the Angus L. Macdonald's and Angus L's to Macdonald's

* Civil service work section, first pargarph, you might reword the second sentence to avoid the ambiguity in the last part of the sentence ("when he personally prosecuted a case" is a bit unclear who the he referred to there. Not terribly unclear, but it is a bit)

• Same section and paragraph. next to last paragraph, the quotation that starts "No miner can remain.." needs a source citation on it.
• Same for the next paragraph, the quotation starting "very active and powerful..."
• Same for the quote in First Term as premier section, that starts "ministers were fresh motivated ..."
• Same for Tourism and Nova with the quote starting "as a place where urban, middle-class..." Also, that sentence is missing a period at the end. I didn't put it in because I wasn't sure about whether it went inside or outside the quote marks.
• More quotes in this paragraph need cites, the ones starting "They witnessed the ..." and "the romanticized culture..." and "Macdonald believed..."
• Citation for the quote in Wartime Federal career, second paragraph, starting "I told Mr. King that I did..."
• And for the quote in Building the navy that starts "few of its ships and .."
• I know the article is long, but it is totally lacking in a legacy section that describes what long lasting effects he had. Anything named for him? Did his policies continue? Did the LIberals get defeated? What happened to the corruption issues that were being raised?
• I don't know what the status is on copyright in Canada, but you might want to get an opinion on whether http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Image:Angus_l_provincial_liberal_book.jpg is really able to be relased as copyright free.

Really a nice article. I'm not a great copyeditor, so I can't testitfy to the brilliance of the prose, but it is readable. At times it seemed a bit wordy, so you might get a good copyedit before FAC (which, given the article's strengths, I'd expect you are aiming for.)

I've put the article on hold for seven days to allow folks to address the issues I've brought up. Feel free to contact me on my talk page, or here with any concerns, and let me know one of those places when the issues have been addressed. If I may suggest that you strike out, check mark, or otherwise mark the items I've detailed, that will make it possible for me to see what's been addressed, and you can keep track of what's been done and what still needs to be worked on. Ealdgyth - Talk 16:36, 10 April 2008 (UTC)

Passing it now. Looks great, when will we see it at FAC? Ealdgyth - Talk 16:04, 17 April 2008 (UTC)