Talk:Angela James/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Canada Hky (talk · contribs) 02:21, 6 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

Only minor things here. I went through and made a few minor, clean-up type edits before starting this review. If you could review them, and make sure I haven't changed the meaning of anything substantial, that would be great.

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
Consider making a note of when her international career ended in the lead? Also, when (year) did she step in as a goalie. If this wasn't at the OWHA level, maybe give it a mention.
Added the end of her international career to lead. And I never could find a source for the specific date of that game as a goalie. Merely the mention that she did play once in that Hockey Canada piece. Reso lute 18:53, 6 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
No problems
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
This kind of overlaps a bit with #4, but the sentence about 'not being secretive nor politicizing', could maybe just be left out. Drawing attention to how someone doesn't draw attention to something doesn't quite fit.
Removed, and I agree that it was awkward. I was trying to convey the viewpoint she expressed as explained in her biography, but kind of botched it. There might be a need for a bit more there, as openly gay athletes are a rarity, but I'm not sure how to word it. Reso lute 18:53, 6 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
See above, but otherwise no problems.
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Not applicable.
Overall:
Pass/Fail:
Minor issues to fix up or reject, I'll be happy to promote this once they are cleaned up.
Addressed the two specific comments that I could. The copyediting you did also looks fine. Thanks for the review! Cheers! Reso lute 18:53, 6 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

The minor issues I had raised were addressed, I'll promote this to GA. Canada Hky (talk) 23:54, 6 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]