Talk:Andrew Leake/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Djmaschek (talk · contribs) 02:25, 4 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Initial review

I plan to review this article. I've skimmed it and it looks good. My full review will follow. Djmaschek (talk) 02:25, 4 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Review 1

@Pickersgill-Cunliffe: For GA class articles, I prefer to have the author make all the changes. Please fix or argue your case for leaving it alone. You will note that I like to see some indication of the year at the start of the paragraph. If I have to look around for the year, I assume other readers will also. Other than that, the article is very well written with few errors. Djmaschek (talk) 05:31, 4 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Well-written, verifiable, broad, neutral, stable, illustrated. Done
Introduction: "joined the navy in 1688 with under the patronage" (Remove either "with" or "under".)

Done.

Introduction: "Promoted to commander but unable to find a post" (He commanded Roebuck and Fox before being assigned to Victory. So "unable to find a post" seems inaccurate.)

Rewritten.

Initial service, paragraph 2: "On 7 August Leake" (Please add 1690.)

Done.

Initial service, paragraph 2: "through the proceeding summer" (I think "proceeding" is the wrong word. Alternatives: "next", "following" or else leave it out - i.e. "through that summer".)

Changed.

Post-captain, paragraph 1: "in July for the armament of that year" (I'm not sure what "in the armament of that year" means. Is "armament" an official event? If not, then I suggest shortening the phrase to: "in July 1693".)

Removed phrase. Would be confusing and probably unhelpful to explain.

Post-captain, paragraph 2: "He was brought back to service on 18 November" (What year? First sentence implies 1698, but it's not clear.)

Yes, clarified.

Vigo Bay and knighthood, paragraph 2: "On 12 October they fought the Battle of Vigo Bay" (Please add 1702.)

Done.

Gibraltar and Málaga, paragraph 1, sentence 2: "Shovell's fleet left Britain on 1 July" (Please add 1703.)

Done.

Gibraltar and Málaga, paragraph 3, sentence 1: "By July Leake had" (Please add 1704.)

Done.

@Djmaschek: Hi, thanks for the review! Have replied above. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 20:31, 4 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]

@Pickersgill-Cunliffe: GA class. While looking for a portrait of Leake, I came across John Leake who was in Newfoundland only a year after Andrew Leake. How confusing! Djmaschek (talk) 05:07, 5 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]