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Reviewer: BenLinus1214 (talk · contribs) 23:54, 11 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Will review after El Camino (The Black Keys album). Johanna (aka BenLinus1214)talk to me!see my work 23:54, 11 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

@Gen. Quon: Comments

Lead
  • I prefer the construction "The sixth season of the…" as opposed to non-bolded but a lot of FLs don't so it's your choice.
    Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 17:33, 15 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • The third paragraph of the lead is mostly development and cast stuff and the second is mostly reception--do you want to maybe reorganize it a bit and flip? (Obviously, use common sense--i.e. keep the DVD stuff in the third para)
    Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 17:33, 15 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Development
  • "After the writers pitch the stories…" It's okay that it's copy-pasted from other season articles, but it's a bit awkward as of now. I would use transitional language in the form of a starting clause "Similarly to previous seasons…" or "In the show's traditional writing schedule…" If you can think of a better phrase, be my guest.
    I tried to completely reword all of this.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 17:33, 15 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]
    OK, I got a good chunk of these taken care of, but I'll come back and try to clean-up the guest cast and episode summary sections.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 17:34, 15 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • Probably should be "these studios" because you mention two.
    Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 17:33, 15 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • You probably don't need to link Yuasa's name again when listing all the personnel.
    Changed.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 17:33, 15 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • Why is LandOfOoo.com a reliable source?
    Generally, it's not, but in this case, Jesse Moynihan created an account and created a "Ask Me Anything"-style thread. Since he's a notable primary source, I figured it's OK.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 17:33, 15 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • In the last sentence, how do you know it was "to ease his departure"?
    Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 17:33, 15 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • You use a lot of social media sources in this section--could you just explain your rationale for this?
    The AT staff is really, really hip to using social media, and they're also very accessible. Via Twitter, Spring.me, and Ask.fm, many a question about production has been answered. Normally, I would shy away from using social media, but since all of the sentences being supported by social media references are generally just production-based facts, I feel like it satisfies WP:SOCIALMEDIA. The show's official (i.e. Cartoon Network and Frederator-sanctioned) production website is also hosted by Tumblr.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 17:33, 15 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Cast
  • I know this is really difficult, but can you try to make the long guest stars paragraphs flow better? It's okay if you can't easily--just let me know.
    I'll work on that soon.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 17:33, 15 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Various other characters are voiced by…" Could you give us a few examples?
    Most of the characters don't have names. I tried to clarify what I meant.--~~!~~
Reception
Episodes
  • Take a quick look through some of the prose for this section. Most of it is surprisingly good, but a few of the short summaries might be able to be cut down, as these are all 11 minute episodes.
    I'll comb over them shortly.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 17:33, 15 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • The summary of episode 28 is fairly short, bizarre, and informal. Rework that one entirely, I would say.
    Whoops. I didn't notice that one. Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 17:33, 15 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

@Gen. Quon: Okay, I'm done. Looks like a very good article--just a few comments to respond to. Johanna (aka BenLinus1214)talk to me!see my work 14:19, 15 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

I'll get on this in the next couple of days, and then I'll get to those GA's you requested!--Gen. Quon (Talk) 15:22, 15 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

@Gen. Quon: Everything you've done already looks great--just seems to be a matter of the prose in the cast paragraphs and then I can pass. Johanna (aka BenLinus1214)talk to me!see my work 13:57, 16 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

I tried to completely reorganized and rewrite it. Is it at least looking better?--Gen. Quon (Talk) 00:42, 17 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Great! I like it a lot more. Pass. By the way, if you have any experience with featured lists, could you possibly interchange one of the forthcoming GA reviews with this FLC? I would really appreciate it. (BTW don't be deterred by the first "oppose, suggest withdrawal" comment--I've fixed all the responses, but the user hasn't edited for a few days--it'll probably be struck). If you aren't comfortable with reviewing a featured list candidate, that's perfectly fine! :) Johanna (aka BenLinus1214)talk to me!see my work 01:50, 17 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]
GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, no copyvios, spelling and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:
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