Talk:2018 Santiago ePrix/GA1
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Reviewer: Courcelles is travelling (talk · contribs) 13:45, 8 June 2018 (UTC)
- I'll take on this one. Courcelles is travelling (talk) 13:45, 8 June 2018 (UTC)
- What is a "lollipop sign"?
- "In response to concerns over several dogs that frequent the Parque Forestal from straying onto the circuit" Does not flow well.
- "The session had fewer incidents this time round" 'This time round' is too informal, and by my count, there are the same number of incidents listed?
- which led to an improved in how his car would operate" Bad grammar
- " this success would strive his team " Not sure "strive" is the word you want?
- "This promoted race organisers " Promoted is the wrong word.
- That's all I see. Courcelles is travelling (talk) 14:10, 8 June 2018 (UTC)
- @Courcelles is travelling: Thanks again for another review. Everything you have raised above has been dealt with and I have made some of my own improvements. MWright96 (talk) 15:30, 8 June 2018 (UTC)
- All is good here, promoting. Courcelles is travelling (talk) 19:35, 8 June 2018 (UTC)
- @Courcelles is travelling: Thanks again for another review. Everything you have raised above has been dealt with and I have made some of my own improvements. MWright96 (talk) 15:30, 8 June 2018 (UTC)