Talk:2017 24 Hours of Daytona/GA1

GA Review

Passed. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 06:44, 5 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 20:16, 3 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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Ping me when done. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 21:52, 3 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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Copy changes

Lead

in Daytona Beach, Florida from needs an MOS:GEOCOMMA
João Barbosa started from the pole position for Mustang Sampling Racing by lapping quickest in qualifying, and held the lead Same subject both sides, so no comma. WP:CINS
with the Mustang Sampling Racing, VisitFlorida Racing, Extreme Speed Motorsports and Whelen Engineering Racing teams be consistent on use or non-use of a serial comma
Is it necessary to list every driver on a team in the lead except for maybe the winning teams? It results in paragraph 3 being a slog to read.

Background

It was the fourth year in a row that the race was part of the series calendar, and the 55th 24 Hours of Daytona. Remove comma (CINS)
Another GEOCOMMA needed
two each from BAR1 Motorsports and Starworks Motorsport, and one from Performance Tech Motorsports Unnecessary comma
There was one Vantage GT3 from Aston Martin Racing, and one BMW M6 GT3 from Turner Motorsport Unnecessary comma

Testing

Ben Hanley' DragonSpeed Typo
A serious fire, caused by a fuel line (allowing fuel to escape and ignite on the warm engine compartment) in Corvette's No. 4 C7.R Complete the appositive by adding a comma after the parentheses

Practice and qualifying

Stéphane Sarrazin stopped his Rebellion Oreca on the bank (also stopping practice with 15 minutes left), and was able to return to the pit lane. Remove comma (CINS)
each class' class's (MOS:'S). also check for "Morris'" and "Mercedes'" etc. later.
The IMSA arranged the grid Should this be just "IMSA", no definite article? There are six instances of "the IMSA" in this page
WTR's Ricky Taylor had the pole position for most of qualifying, before Jani's lap demoted him to fourth. Unneeded comma
on the tyre barrier at the International Horseshoe should this be "tire" to be American English?

Race

Hartley could not steer due to damage, and stopped on the entrance to the Bus Stop chicane for recovery to the pit lane on a flatbed truck Remove comma (CINS)
Briscoe's No. 67 Ford sustained rear-wing damage against the barrier at the exit of the Bus Stop chicane after he lost control, and went to the garage for repairs. Remove comma (CinS)
this dropped the WTR car to second, and promoted Rast's VisitFlorida car to the lead Remove comma (CinS)
WTR's Angelelli retook the lead from Rast's VisitFlorida entry and Porsche's speed in the rain moved Add a comma after "entry"
PC leading Performance Tech car Hyphenate "PC-leading"
Add comma after "pit stop in WTR's Cadillac"
Angelelli had an anxious moment when he struck a damp curb and lost control of WTR's Cadillac entering the Bus Stop chicane, but retained his lead over Barbosa Add "he" after "but"
He crashed into the tire wall, and continued by reversing. Remove comma (CinS)
Ricky Taylor's WTR and Mustang Sampling's Albuquerque dueled for the overall lead and Hand moved the No. 66 Ford back to first in GTLM Add a comma after "lead"
Race control investigated the collision, but took no action against Taylor Remove comma

After the race

Reduce direct use of quotes; consider saying things in other words if possible.
on their Audi which lengthened their pit stops Add comma after Audi

Sourcing and spot checks

Question on 18: What makes Super GT World, a WordPress blog, reliable?

23: Confirms all performance changes made. Y
29: Mowlem lap time and Davis leading class. Y
50: Ford top 3 qualifying sweep. Y
55: O'Ward lead in PC. Y
71: Race leader sequence shows changes for the lead in the race. Y
87: The #31 meanwhile underwent lengthy repairs which cost the car six laps, after damage sustained from the incident with the #88 Starworks PC Oreca... Y
92: Hartley, unable to steer the car, then came to a halt on the entrance to the Bus Stop, forcing the organisers to load the Ligier onto a flatbed to get it back to the pits. Y
93: This source is now paywalled for me.
94: In Prototype Challenge, the No. 38 Performance Tech Motorsports entry of Nicholas Boulle retains its four-lap lead over Gustavo Yacaman in the No. 20 BAR1 Motorsports car. Y
101: Same as 93.
117: Dirk Muller – reunited with Joey Hand and Sebastien Bourdais in the Le Mans-winning No. 66 Ford GT – held off Patrick Pilet’s No. 911 Porsche 911 RSR by 2.988 seconds in a four-car sprint to the finish. Y
125: Not paywalled, but 404 not found. Check this link.
127: Quotes are accurately reproduced. Y

Earwig falsely flags some tables with names of racers.

Images

Three images, all appropriately licensed. There's even alt text.

@Sammi Brie: I have made changes to the article based on the points raised in the review EnthusiastWorld37 (talk) 19:47, 4 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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