Talk:2014 Bahrain Grand Prix/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Zwerg Nase (talk · contribs) 13:54, 12 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Review will follow shortly. Zwerg Nase (talk) 13:54, 12 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

I just realized that I completely forgot about this review... will give it very soon, so sorry! Zwerg Nase (talk) 10:08, 8 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@Zwerg Nase: Still haven't heard anything regarding this review. Is everything alright? I understand fully if real life commitments are taking priority. MWright96 (talk) 20:19, 24 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Same issue as the Monaco article with wording of tyre choice in quali section.
- Done MWright96 (talk) 20:44, 26 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]
He went off into the corner's run-off area onto the exit kerbs.. - it is unclear who "he" is in this context.
- That would be Daniel Ricciardo who made that error. MWright96 (talk) 20:44, 26 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]
Hülkenberg took advantage of Bottas sounds weird, I would recommend rephrasing that. He did not rape him after all...
- Changed to Hülkenberg overtook Bottas
Having saved more fuel, he would have more horsepower available - I guess "he" is Rosberg, not Ricciardo??
- Yes it was Rosberg. MWright96 (talk) 20:44, 26 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]
Ricciardo locked his tyres going into turn one and narrowly avoided impacting the Ferrari - which Ferrari?
- Raikkonen's Ferrari. MWright96 (talk) 20:44, 26 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]
Maldonado was unable to react to Gutiérrez steering right into the first corner and hit his right-rear corner, rolling over twice in the air - this sounds like Maldonado rolled over, but it was Gutierrez
- Have changed the wording of this statement. MWright96 (talk) 20:44, 26 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]
Pérez fended off a challenge from teammate Hülkenberg for third and defended from Vettel. Button fell to seventh after being passed by Vettel - the timeline seems off here. I would recommend just removing the second part of the first sentence which mentions Vettel, because it also sounds like Perez and not Hülkenberg was defending from him.
- Removed. MWright96 (talk) 20:44, 26 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]
Ricciardo passed teammate Vettel for fourth - for fifth if I am not mistaken??
- Ah yes, changed it MWright96 (talk) 20:44, 26 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

As you can see, mainly some inconsistency in the race report prose need to be sorted out here. Great work so far! Zwerg Nase (talk) 19:48, 26 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@Zwerg Nase: I have implemented the changes that you have suggested and made some of my own edits to the prose. MWright96 (talk) 20:44, 26 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Looks good! I can promote this to GA. Sorry again for the huge delay and congrats! Zwerg Nase (talk) 20:59, 26 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]